Sea E'scape

Sea E'scape

A Poem by Frieda P

I lie still in the midnight surf
crashing waves rushing over me
pummeling an already broken soul
ravaging my cold chamber'd heart
torn apart by thunderous clouds,
that day you sail'd for better horizons

Sinking breathlessly onto the edge,
hoping for ocean's depth to unfurl
this magnitude of boundless space
left behind in your parting tides,
sand engulfs my weeping eyes
etching how blind'd love can be


Hauntingly sad violin cries in the distance, 
strumming the siren call on wing'd strings
whilst ebb'd flow of tears immerse,
drowning ceaselessly in streams...


© 2014 Frieda P


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Frieda P


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I like where this is coming from right from the first line. I am a water baby, so midnight surf is my kind of place to be...The term "cold-chambered heart" is great! This reminds me of a time when I tossed off my clothes in the winter on Ocean Beach in San Francisco in front of all my friends who I used to go to the beach and play guitar with and I ran out into the water in the middle of the night because I felt, like you are describing, I was broken and lonely!! I had had a terrible break up. "This magnitude of boundless space" really gets to the heart of it! I like that this is not an overtly negative piece. The title "E'scape" says that there is a "seascape of hope" here. It is less "sad" than melancholy. It is less "tragic" than mournful. I always love that you have an overall conception that works! I am always saddened when people write one dimensional poetry. This clearly has a number of levels of interpretation and plot. That is always a pleasure in your writing!! There is the superficial but also the profound, and everything in-between.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

10 Years Ago

Wow Robby, you've left me speechless, I'm so thrilled you felt this one...I'm truly humbled by your .. read more
Robert Tusitala O'Neill

10 Years Ago

Well, clearly I get where you are coming from...It was an interesting night at the beach. When I ca.. read more
Frieda P

10 Years Ago

That is a brutal story, so the sea was cleansing to your spirit, I get that...and I'm sure they tho.. read more



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strumming the siren call on wing'd strings
whilst ebb'd flow of tears immerse,
drowning ceaselessly in streams…

Each of those teardrops takes away a drop of pain … great write, Frieda.

Posted 10 Years Ago


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Frieda P

10 Years Ago

Slowly, yes...thanks Pryde.
Very nice turn of phrase, as deep as the sea, and sad as the surf crashing on the rocky shore.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

10 Years Ago

Thanks so much, appreciate your visit.
I have a thoughtful exercise to propose to you, Frieda. Take this wonderful composition and separate it into three groups of words such that the lines beginning with verbs go into one group, the line nouns go into another group and all the rest into the final group. Create a poem from each group using only the words in that group. See what you come up with. I would be extremely curious to read the result of that effort (should you wish to undertake it.) Consider me your temporary muse-substitute if that will help. :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


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Frieda P

10 Years Ago

OMG a test, I suck at those...I'll try, grazie, I think ;-)
so beautiful ........ v nice

Posted 10 Years Ago


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Frieda P

10 Years Ago

Thanks Wilderness...
WILDERNESS

10 Years Ago

welcome dear............... enjoyed
How am I supposed to review after that magnificent review Jack gave... omg.

This is beautiful Frieda. The imagery you wrote was amazing, and so, so vivid. The wording and flow is just divine. You hit the Jackpot every time with your writes.

//Hauntingly sad violin cries in the distance,
strumming the siren call on wing'd strings
whilst ebb'd flow of tears immerse,
drowning ceaselessly in streams...//

absolutely stunning, some of the phrases in here were to literally die for... I think I may be in heaven right now...

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

s y e

10 Years Ago

It so is not OTT! x
Frieda P

10 Years Ago

'Tis so, and Heaven, can't top those! x
s y e

10 Years Ago

It is not... do not argue with me Frieda.... x
I can relate to your sad, sad poem Frieda....drowning in an ocean of memories....
On another note, you have a wonderful gift for writing heartwrenching poems that are so filled with beauty - they just curl right up in my heart.
I love this one.

:) Julie

Posted 10 Years Ago


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Frieda P

10 Years Ago

What a divine review, thanks so much Julie, really appreciate your kind words. :-)
Beautiful language here Frieda....a painting !!!
Sorrowful..the sea and loneliness...
How magnificent you pen..!
I am your fan !!
Admiration.
Scott

Posted 10 Years Ago


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Frieda P

10 Years Ago

Does that mean you'll refrain from calling me cheeky monkey now? Thanks so much Scott, much appreci.. read more
Scott Metro

10 Years Ago

Had this been any more realistic..I would have had to wear a mask and snorkel just to read the lines.. read more
When the heart feels the loss of its every fibre life can seem a very lonely shoreline. Frieda, once again I am enchanted and hypnotized by your beautiful poetry. After reading this wonderful piece today, warmth engulfs my entire being. My life could end and I would feel satisfied.

Posted 10 Years Ago


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Frieda P

10 Years Ago

Wow Jack..you floor'd me with this review, thanks so much, you made my entire week my friend!
Beautiful!!!!!!!!!!!! I adore this so much.You are truly a literary genius.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

10 Years Ago

You humble me Talesha, thanks so much my friend!
Talesha

10 Years Ago

It really is the other way around :) Your words are magnificent.

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If you want to know me, read my poetry, it's all in there. I am a mother of three sons (my finest moments) a sister, a survivor and a little bit crazy. I lost my beloved sister to suicide, so you'll.. more..

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