~Battle ASSHAT

~Battle ASSHAT

A Poem by Frieda P
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Read Rita's' Assault Similes' follow up, it's a riot! http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/RitaSev/1311193/#comment-3279177 For just a chosen few, & you know who you asshats are...

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Scream like a lunatic banshee
get all up in everyone's script'd pen,
call us whatever you please
you bullies are all assimilated alike
criticize the things you fear the most
you're weak in the emblematic knees
seriously, who do you think you're kidding, 
you've not a metaphorical backbone
so fire away, machine gun til you're blitz'd
ricochet us through the assimilated heart 
we're bullet proof epic poesy'd warriors
you shoot us down, try to murder a writer's spirit
take your best shot, try to blow us away
we're here with assault similes to stay
fell on your own sword and bled weakness
we've risen to the unverse'd occasion, 
our poetic souls are tougher than titanium

 

© 2014 Frieda P


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Too cool, "Bullet-proof epic poesy'd warriors" now that's a title to wear into battle. My sweet friend, you have slapped someone upside the head this morning with this fire-breathing gem. And even in battlemode, your words still carry an air of poetic elegance, albeit while standing along side the cannons hollering "Fire!" Looks like a valliant victory is at hand and no peace treaty will be needed...just run'em off dear poet.

Amazing as always my friend.

Posted 6 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

6 Years Ago

Ha, can you tell I was perturbed? Some people just don't know when to call it quits...thanks Jack, .. read more



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SWEET!!

The bullets may fly... yet I doubt it will hit it's target...

Well penned, feisty Frieda!!.... You go girl!~xoxo~;)

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

6 Years Ago

Ha I must start wearing panties!! haha ;-)
Robbie~xoxo~

6 Years Ago

Now you tell me! lol
Frieda P

6 Years Ago

;-P I thought you were meditating OM hahah
Well if this isn't Mrs.R I don't know who is...Frieda has been kidnapped! ;P You are always at your best when you bring a snarl to the party, but this is an outright growl haha It's also another masterful piece that wrapped me in a web of phenomenal imagery and emotional spark...I am not worthy my love ;) xo

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

6 Years Ago

Hahaha that wicked Mrs R, sometimes she just can't contain herself!! You just put a stupid shyteass.. read more
kublakhan27

6 Years Ago

Haha Well you're good at doing that to my face Mrs.R, so I consider it even ;) xo
Cool and great. I love it when you don't mince words Frieda. Keep it up friend.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

6 Years Ago

I never did like mince much, thanks Divya! :-)
DIVYA

6 Years Ago

You are welcome Frieda. ;)
ok... this one is something different!.....................oo

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

6 Years Ago

Ha you must know the type N....always happy when I don't have to explain my poems to you ;-)
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ron
Nice Frieda, put them in their places.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

ron

6 Years Ago

No, if I was going to make you work today I would be the one who would be tired :)
Frieda P

6 Years Ago

Ha smartypants ;-)
ron

6 Years Ago

Lol ;-) ...
Wow, I think this may be the first time I've seen you angry in your writing. It's startling, beautiful, and just absolutely powerful. the way you challenge those neigh Sayers, telling them to go ahead and shoot, is not only brave but vibrant. I love the way you encourage writers with your own emotions, you are truly one of the nine muses Frieda. Beautiful.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

6 Years Ago

Woo you blew me away with this review, I nearly fell off my chair songstress, I get passionate when .. read more
songstress

6 Years Ago

Thank you, for writing so beautifully.
This is great - a shot at Bullies, who couldn't like that. I especially like your cheeky little image to top it off.:)

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

6 Years Ago

Thanks, there was an even cheekier image, but it was over the top even for moi! ;-)
Cloaked with a shield of righteousness today, eh? I've come across a few of those "asshats"... narcissistic... insecure... cowardly... but i can tell you already know... great job frieda

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

6 Years Ago

I'm sure we all have, I was being kind by using the word asshat.....thanks xavier.
Boy...quite the little warrior aren't you..LOL
You nailed 'em good...remind me not to pee in your coffee or anything..
I was going to send you a bottle of perfume..now..a bottle of Iodine..lol
Well done.
Scott

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

6 Years Ago

So go first, what are you a chicken or a wolf? ahahhaa
Scott Metro

6 Years Ago

OK..I'll just tell everyone about my trip to NJ....lol......hah...give me a bit and you'll be fuming.. read more
Frieda P

6 Years Ago

HA in your dreams luv ;-P
A satirical and engaging piece, remind me not to get on your bad side!

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

6 Years Ago

Oh silly boy, how is that even possible?!
Thomas Fitzgerald

6 Years Ago

Well I can be quite pretentious and over bearing at times, but I love you all the same!
Frieda P

6 Years Ago

Pftt & pssh, you? hahahah love your right back dear!

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