Hallow'd Breathing

Hallow'd Breathing

A Poem by Frieda P

Haunted in my flagrant dreams,
    awake on hallow'd ground
you watch me breathe
        as I seek you out
cold spirits taunted past
           spasmodic verses chant
hollow insides afraid to sleep
  your sanctification renders me
                  uncomfortably conscious
numb within breath's shallow inhale
       undone in the nothingness of rhyme
   fearing truth's brutal reality
     bewailing in grief's heartfelt desire
pull me up to new sight'd heights
   in your wayward plight's surrender
       save me from this cruel humanness




© 2014 Frieda P


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Very well worded, Frieda. Sorry, I always repeat my compliments to you. :P Anyway, I think in "you watch me breath", it's supposed to be "breathe"?

"save me from this cruel humanness" In my dark days, I would've nodded to this but I'm happy being human and being alive right now. ;) Don't stop dancing, Frieda. :P



Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

6 Years Ago

I can't believe I missed that, thanks so much, you're on the ball you nutter. ;-) Will never stop d.. read more
Blue

6 Years Ago

Breathing is easier, though. Haha.
Frieda P

6 Years Ago

Not for me..... ;-P



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Oh the pain that is expressed here is just so heartbreaking. its crazy good though.

Posted 5 Years Ago


Simultaneously evocative and libidinous…

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

MomzillaNC

5 Years Ago

You're welcome. And, it was definitely very sexy, bordering on orgasmic.
Frieda P

5 Years Ago

Wow really, that's the beauty of poetry, we all see it through different eyes....thanks again.
MomzillaNC

5 Years Ago

You're welcome.
Very well worded, Frieda. Sorry, I always repeat my compliments to you. :P Anyway, I think in "you watch me breath", it's supposed to be "breathe"?

"save me from this cruel humanness" In my dark days, I would've nodded to this but I'm happy being human and being alive right now. ;) Don't stop dancing, Frieda. :P



Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

6 Years Ago

I can't believe I missed that, thanks so much, you're on the ball you nutter. ;-) Will never stop d.. read more
Blue

6 Years Ago

Breathing is easier, though. Haha.
Frieda P

6 Years Ago

Not for me..... ;-P
Another outstanding poem, and its so relate-able. :-D

Kaze~

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

6 Years Ago

Thanks muchly Kazie. :-)
Lildeadcupcake

6 Years Ago

All good. :-D
in your wayward plight's surrender
save me from this cruel humanness

Love this poems meaning and this song. Good work :)

Posted 6 Years Ago


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Frieda P

6 Years Ago

Thanks Shaquana, jazz'd you enjoyed.
pull me up to new sight'd heights
in your wayward plight's surrender
save me from this cruel humanness

We are all so afraid there won't be enough. Felt this one, Frieda.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

6 Years Ago

Thanks Pryde.
Cruel humaness that just speaks absolute volumes does it not. We are damaged and bruised and some of us damage and bruise even those that we love.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

6 Years Ago

So so true, thanks Anne.
I've read a few of your poems and they all seem a tad abstract to me, with meaning that is deeper than you let on. Dark and intricate. They're all very fascinating :)

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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Spacecadet

6 Years Ago

Its writes like yours that bring me back to reality :)
Frieda P

6 Years Ago

Kind of you to say, thanks again!
If I understand the review below, this is an elegy...and a fine one too, written with all the quality of classical poetry. Excellent.

Posted 6 Years Ago


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Frieda P

6 Years Ago

Yes Leslie, it was written with my beloved sister in mind, thanks so much.
One often finds oneself thinking on times and feeling that can not be changed, moved or forgotten, your words break those rules, well done, good read.

Posted 6 Years Ago


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Frieda P

6 Years Ago

Grazie mille Thomas.

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If you want to know me, read my poetry, it's all in there. I am a mother of three sons (my finest moments) a sister, a survivor and a little bit crazy. I lost my beloved sister to suicide, so you'll.. more..

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