Just a silly rhyme....sort of

It's satire people, lighten up ;-)

My life was never meant to rhyme

nor a stitch in time

although i do have rhythmy blues

metaphorically speaking, i sure can tap those shoes

give me prose any day of the week,

and I can certainly turn it bleak

frays upside down and sideways

that's the house specialty craze

my maze'd poetic verse 

is strictly unrehearsed,

prancing delusions

of uttermost confusion

if you're discombobulated,  kerfuffl'd

or bewilder'd,  join the cafe's allusions

 I told you I couldn't rhyme!

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

your words have rhythm and beat, who needs rhyme...seldom use it myself unless it is natural...but then there are those purists who believe form has to be followed always..

oh well...can't please all the people all the time...

and my poetry reflects my life for sure...not much rhyme...and at times the rhythm goes off like a bad song.

[Frieda P]

Thanks jacob, yep some people have strict rules about this poetry stuff, can't please em all is right.

[♔ CrownedDevil &#..]

Love the quote, hahahahahahha! Brilliantly written Frieda. :-D

Kaze~

[Blue]

My, my. I enjoyed this, Frieda. I think you did well on this! :)

Comical and cute write. :)

[Frieda P]

*Laughing* here, sometimes you just gotta say it. ;-)

[Wolfwind]

You said Kerfuffl'd! How awesome! =D

While I suppose rock and roll can be the cure... I think Rhymes are pretty good, like fine wine that with time, get better with the rythem of the days.

Thanks for sharing!
Aaron

[Frieda P]

Ha great word isn't it? ;-) I like rhyme too if it's done well, it just doesn't come naturally to me...nice to see you back again Aaron!

[paul sal.....]

Rhyming is cool, prose is cool, writing is cool ,sharing is cool; infinitely better than shooting at each other. Last line suggestion: " I told you i'd never be muzzled . " My sense frieda, is that you like to talk, and you do it very well with words. Obviously, the point was about to rhyme or not to rhyme and, I say, what ever floats your boat..........

[Frieda P]

I concur, it's all good, but some people are of the mindset it needs to rhyme. Ha, you have my number eh? I purposely didn't want the ending to rhyme...but thanks so much for the suggestion, muchly appreciate your thoughts p......

[paul sal.....]

Hey, that's the purpose of this place, is it not? Please visit my place when you have a chance....

[bob, small b. aka invs]

i'm disappointed you didn't rhyme 'kerfuffl'd'

[Frieda P]

Ha kiss my arse, I told you I couldn't rhyme ;-)

[Glen Yumang Manese]

What in carnations...did you come up with this time...
I'm feeling a bit better....
just wanted to stop by and make my presence known...
this had a thought out plan...no...
seems you were just going with it...
no particular theme...except what is presented...

[Frieda P]

Something someone said to me, ha the theme is kiss my tuchus....thanks Glen...how's that book going and the baby due?

[Glen Yumang Manese]

The book is fair...the readership is through the roof...our genre --- poetry...is a hard sale...but I'm positive with the outcome...E-book is numero uno at the moment...Hardcover is second and Paperback is trailing behind in third...I'm in the Philippines...so I do not have many contacts...at the moment...my USA readers and international readers as carrying me at 3 months into this project...Shipping and handling here to the Philippines is super expensive...also being ill for a month did not help with promotion of the book...all in all I'm making ends meet...readership above all is what I want from this first book...gain public support and pour down a another might storm with the secondary book: Luna & the Ra...as for the baby...the new love of my life...due date is August 26th...I will do a children's book for him or her...whichever the case may maybe...bring them into the world of literature...and my wife can crunch the numbers...she is exactly opposite of me in the spectrum of things...Writer meets Accountant...and fall in love...sort of way...without sounding all mushy...good day...feels like a breath of fresh air...my lungs have been on fire for weeks...God bless...

[Vidya Bacchus]

I find it really hard to rhyme too.This was funny and very much Freida :)

[Frieda P]

Ha snarky you mean? ;-P

[Vidya Bacchus]

Yes snarky lol

[Frieda P]

Like looking in the mirror huh? haha

[Vidya Bacchus]

Ha aint that the truth :D

[Linda alexander]

I laughed lot of times by reading your poems, which is more than anything in the world I need at present, so your writing and many other writings helped me immensely, I may say reader is independent in every sense, still Xavier Silverton is my favorite poet, sorry

[Frieda P]

Thanks Linda, glad you got a larf out of it, he's one of my favorite's too...

[Linda alexander]

You most welcome, take care

[oscardelamarca]

hello friend, sometimes it is not necessary to make rhyme or write something good, just need a bohemian mind, to express a poetic mind from feelings, enjoy it and I like your style

[Frieda P]

Ah like that bohemian style, thanks so much for your visit and review, I like your style too.

[Tai Ryens]

I particularly like how the poem itself is an example of the inability to rhyme, an aspect that I assume symbolizes the caprice of reality and the general inability to capture that in its perfect form. A poem about not being able to rhyme, trying anyways, but failing to rhyme anyways. Clever, if I do say so myself. Well done.

[Frieda P]

Thanks Tai, I'm glad you said so yourself too. Muchly appreciated.