Hallelujah, you bore me...‏

you bore me,

stop shuffling that stuff

exhaling smoky vapors

steamy delicacies bite

moonlit zephyrs are a farce

butterflies altogether expired

envy and loathing are blank

posies wilted, lovers jilted

monkey's stuck in the eye

same old darkly sing along

poppies & Cohen over & over

*play it again Sam*

cotton candy castles take a dive

laughing in thine own face

lunatics missed the boat

in apostrophe'd apocalypse 

this is what they call  fantasmic idioms

repeating the same old tired phrases

air your dirty laundry closer to the disposal

Hallelujah!...there you go again...

Author's Note

captcha~overgoad

Reviews

[kublakhan27]

Haha Kind of ironic that I would take on this one today in light of line two and that other poem ;) I knew by the title that this would be something different, and you never disappoint. I love how you've turned many of your poetic trademarks on their ear here. So these are what fantasmic idioms are...I'm assuming that's your own creation for I've never heard the term before. Even in your humourous pieces I come away feeling as though I've learned something, usually how to write insanely brilliant poetry...kudos as always Mrs.R :) xo

[Frieda P]

Ha I had to check, that's too funny, I never even thought of that! I guess 'fantasmic' (oops I guess not, it's now underlined in red) is a word...if not, it should be ;-) Grazie mille Benji, always love to read your responses... xo

[kublakhan27]

Haha That's what Benji is for Mrs.R ;) I'm pretty sure it's a word, I stopped trusting the so-called spell check on this site aeons ago...they give me red lines for words that I know damn well exist, and see in a number of other places, so it isn't just me and my so-called big words haha The spelling would be phantasmic though ;) Glad you love my responses as much as I love reading your stuff Mrs.R :) xo

[Ravyne Hawke]

Love this! Enjoyed the fashionably placed idioms and how they reflect sarcasm and wit. Well done, as always, Frieda! (Doing the same thing over and over again, expecting a different result, is insanity... so I guess saying the same tired ole things over and over again can be a bit insane as well.. lol).

[FlamingPhoenix]

I love this because it makes me find humor in myself and in others I know. What an incredibly refreshing read!

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much, glad it took you there, always have to have a good laugh at ourselves, life is pretty funny if you think about it. :)

[BlackRose]

Not boring by any means. You use of words here are so clever and a bit hilarious. Someone sure got on your bad side it seems, ha. Really great piece.

[Frieda P]

Just taking pot shots at myself, just one of those days, you know how that goes...thanks, jazz'd!

[BlackRose]

Yes, I sure do. I have had those as well knowing how it goes, ha. Very welcome.

[s y e]

Zzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz, oopsie, I fell asleep, sorry. ;-)

This made me laugh out loud, it's not boring one little bit. Who peed in your coco pops the other day, ahaha.

[Frieda P]

Ha that made me laugh out loud....scooby dooby dooby ;-) Did you listen to that song, figured you'd like that one....

[s y e]

The song is going to be my new favourite.... Loved that too. Just let me wake up a little more and I'll be jazzing to it.

[Frieda P]

Wake up?! It's past nooner there....

[s y e]

OMG, woman you are slow today!

[Frieda P]

I guess so, since I still don't get it....haha WHAT?

[s y e]

I fell asleep reading the poem, hence the 'Zzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz, oopsie, I fell asleep, sorry. ;-)' so then I said let me wake up..... omg.

[Frieda P]

Ha I told ya I'm off today....leave me alone waaah! ;P

[s y e]

I think you're having a brain poop day... my good golly gosh, mama F - wake up or I'll come wake you up with a bucket of cold water, a screaming cat and a whole lot of jumping off sofas and beds.

[Frieda P]

Sheesh sounds like my last nightmare haha

[s y e]

Haha, well you better wake up or I will make it come true. ;-)

[Frieda P]

I don't plan on it anytime soon, I'm liking my own little safe cocoon muchly at the moment, tyvm ;)

[lee von cleef]

Cris cross applesauce overgoad capchad Friedas ear.
Lucky Lucky overgoad, His point is clear.
Overgoad, robs her, whispers manna to her mouth,
Bow down, Oh no she won't,
Overgoad,licks her,Salt block of Honey,
Showers her with candling thought.
Overgoad, speaking to Fancy Freida and myself about
Off line company that we were keeping, told us...

"Birds with feathers flies in flocks. You boys n Girls understand what I'm saying to you ?."

Fun for Following, But don't stand in the Gate when she cuts the Cows loose.
Nature will find a way....

[lee von cleef]

Oh it is fun to be nutz.

[Frieda P]

LOL....ha my stomach hurts I'm laughing so hard!!!!!! hahaha

[lee von cleef]

Thought that might get you out of that rut.

[Frieda P]

It flipped me over too, now I'm dizzy..........

[lee von cleef]

Had to edit it for all to enjoy....

[lee von cleef]

Hallelujah, you bore me...‏ Now get up and .....chew.. write.

[Frieda P]

Oh sheesh I can only imagine, send me the original ;-P

[lee von cleef]

Naughty what a good word, Naughty. gotta go smile,

[Frieda P]

Thought Naughty was your middle name...........

[lee von cleef]

no that would be Flirty

[Frieda P]

Ha we have the same middle name so ;-)

[lee von cleef]

Voted, Senior Class Flirt, too cool

[Frieda P]

Ha the good old days, in joisey our's are more like 'most likely to shoot someone' ;-)

[lee von cleef]

ah send em swimming in new boots

[DIVYA]

A found this poem very cute. There are so many catastrophes happening here. Posies wilted lovers jilted, cotton candy castles taking a dive and the worst, butterflies dying altogether. Brings on lots of smiles.

You score some great points here Frieda. We must have the ability to sometimes smile at ourselves. Much enjoyed!

[Frieda P]

I concur, I regularly laugh at myself...why let the others have all the fun? ;-) Thanks muchly Divya!

[DIVYA]

I concur too. :)
Keep smiling and laughing Frieda!

[Rob Santana]

Yeah, yeah I know. My status bar comments are to cheesy.......

[Frieda P]

Yep it's always about you you you ....................... ;-)

[Rob Santana]

hahahahaha

[Cassie]

Even me such people bore me. I like like like this...

[Frieda P]

*laughing* here it's about me and my poetry! ;-) Thanks Cassie......

[MachinaWriter]

Haha...sorry, I couldn't help but grin a little at this. It cracks me up. I think I know where the humour in that other piece came from now. Plus, I saw Cohen again. No, but you have a bit of bite to your writing. At least, in this one you do. It's quite funny, but maybe that's just me lol I find sarcasm and satire very, very humorous lol

[MachinaWriter]

Plus, on the note of Cohen, the title really amused me after I read that. Not sure if that was intentional, but it made me smile, nevertheless.

[Frieda P]

GRRR what do you mean bite sir? ;-) Thanks so much, I'm cuckoo for Cohen, you may have noticed that too. haha

[MachinaWriter]

One of my favourite songs of all time is Famous Blue Raincoat lol

[Frieda P]

Oh wow I just caught this, I do love that one, but I'm Your Man, is my all time favorite of his...

[MachinaWriter]

haha, yeah it's a good one. he's a poet