surrender under gypsy stardust ~

surrender under gypsy stardust ~

A Poem by Frieda P
"

shorelines met the heavens

"
surrendered under gypsy stardust,
   our dance an inflamed kiss 
skies impassioned the intensity
  of fervent moonbeam's heated embrace
filled my wildest aching desires
   within your ardor's fiery captivation
enthralling an enchanted sunset's obscurity
     knees went weak in a zealous fulfilled sunrise,
sensation's of endmost satiated gusto,
   shorelines met the heavens in exquisite divinity
breathless in the glory of worlds imploding,
  chanted to the gods on wind's splendor
rode the dark stallion until the
           resplendent bliss of night burst forth
                                 in contented ecstasy 

© 2014 Frieda P


Author's Note

Frieda P


Andrew Atroshenko ~ Gypsy Painting

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oooooooh back to the heat and spice that you do so well.. yum.... but you knew I would be melting all over this one... they sensual rhythm of the music mirrors the erotic dance of nature as it prepares for the naughty magic of the night.. love it... the word choice again is so deliciously sexy and palpable as it reaches out and tingles in all the right places... oooh yes ma'am.. lovely.. bliss... :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

9 Years Ago

Ooooh la la, another sweet review, gotta love when nature gets naughty. ;) Thanks so much April. :)
AprilRN1210

9 Years Ago

Yes ma'am. Indeed.. As always, my pleasure :)



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I am sure this deserves a full review so I will do that as soon as I get home your brain might be more scattered than mine your thoughts are certainly more metaphoric

Posted 9 Years Ago


it sure is a nice feeling when the knees go weak....that natural reaction to someone....nothing thought out, or planned.....spontaneous combustion....BAM!

Posted 9 Years Ago


when I read I literally felt like you whispering those words... I was enchanting and reading it again and again to absorb the beauty.

Posted 9 Years Ago


According to the li'l knowledge i have.. i guess that gypsies dance under the moonbeams,ripping off their clothes as their skin is kissed by it.Whoa !! What a lovely poetic description you've created.The wild poetic soul wants to do the gypsy dance.... i am gonna sing.. oooo la la la. !! And seriously this is such a passionate surrender of the gypsy. Like we surrender to our carnal desires in the heat of the night!! ;)

~Sophy

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

9 Years Ago

Silly girl, how else would one dance under a moonbeam? ;) So jazz'd you enjoyed my Gypsy's soul try.. read more
Sophy Freebirds

9 Years Ago

Rip off!! Ha.. :) i am doing hip hop like a silly :p It was a pleasure killer ;) and yea that devil .. read more
Frieda, are you seriously trying to unhinge my mind, twirl me in Gypsy magic and seduce me with "fulfilled sunrise, /sensation's of endmost satiated gusto"... cause if you are, (or even if you aren't) I am weak kneed and lying sated on these shore lines... But I suspect that you knew I would love this poem especially with lines like, "breathless in the glory of worlds imploding,"... but it really is unfair to pick out only some lines, especially since each line has it's breath taking "surrender"..

You also know how to weave the words you write with such inticing music... never heard this before but will hear it often now... the kind of music , like the poem that stays in your mind and reappears whenever it feel like it and without notice.. and I thought you said you couldn't sing... HA!!! I can only add, "I Surrender".. ;0) oxox

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

9 Years Ago

This is one of my favorites...
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=uh1isv5s0uo
redzone

9 Years Ago

ahhh Frieda, its Barcelona Nights, I know this song and yes LOVE IT!!! and now that I am listening t.. read more
Frieda P

9 Years Ago

Anytime love...he does a mean Samba Pa Ti too....
your wildest imagination touches my soul

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

9 Years Ago

What a sweet sentiment, thanks so much Ron.
 wordman

9 Years Ago

you are welcome
Very sexy and romantic, a warm and fuzzy feel to this one -- I feel like dancing on a beach now ...

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

9 Years Ago

Sounds like a plan to me KL, not sure you meant dancing though....
Lyn Anderson

9 Years Ago

Hmm, there are so many things I could say here ...
Frieda P

9 Years Ago

And I know exactly what they be ....haha
"shorelines met the heavens in exquisite divinity
breathless in the glory of worlds imploding,
chanted to the gods on wind's splendor"

A masterful write resplendent with enchantment and music galore. The gypsy spirit has it contented Ecstasy but with a fiery captivation...Excellent...:)..............................

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

9 Years Ago

I love the word 'resplendent'....thanks so much Sami, glad you enjoyed my gypsy tryst. ;)
Sami Khalil

9 Years Ago

Wow. You are welcome muchly...:)....
I love the vocabulary you used in this one dear, it bring the reader into a different world, full of magic and fantasy. I often try to find lines that call out to me more than the others in poems, but I found that in this piece every line was just as beautiful and intricate as all the others. Every line had at least one word that was a surprise to see in writing, ones rarely used. Stardust, gusto, imploding, resplendent to name a few. Gorgeous my dear poetess, thank you for this.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

9 Years Ago

Thanks for your charming review Ashira, you put a huge smile on my poetic heart. :)
Blissfully beautiful in content and the music all make for a lovely enchanting piece...you have an awesome writing talent....

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

9 Years Ago

Thanks so much Fran Marie, muchly appreciate your kind words.

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