~house of cards falls down

Behind this wall of plastered promises

foundations breaking in trembling tree tops

blocking the zephyrs that cool my keep

no light enters through those blind spots

breezes stuck in lock down's sentiments

torched the bed in emotion's steamroller

desperate structures resting on old laurels

placed a bet at the top floor suite

ended up on ground level's division

watched the house of cards fall down

Author's Note

Reviews

[DIVYA]

"desperate structures resting on old laurels
placed a bet at the top floor suite
ended up on ground level's division
watched the house of cards fall down"

This writing scores an ace as far as talking of hopelessness in relationships goes. We can go on for so long on something so little that transpired so many eons ago.

"wall of plastered promises" - a stunning phrase Frieda...it sums up how little we sometimes setlle for! Another gem! And looking forward to more.

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much Divya, wasn't sure about this one, I should have known if you read it, you would relate, I feel better about it now...grazie mille!

[Lyn Anderson]

This could be about one thing, but it could be about another. Deceit takes all forms and clouds and surrounds us and hurts us in its many ways. The worst of it is what it does to our trust. And down comes that house of cards.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

The music adds to the profundity of this poem!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

My Lady, I bow to your feelings in this poignant piece. I find it hard to respond for obvious reason. Life is far from simple, emotions fraught and souls damaged by the ravages of deceite. When one casts around and tries to find a safe harbour there are often ships wrecked in that bay. Another gem!

[Aethereal]

It’s always possible the minuscule weight of one last broken promise may collapse an elegant structure of endearment built over a lifetime. I enjoyed how you used this metaphor to describe such a broken relationship.

[Enayet1999]

Excellent poem, well done!
'desperate structures-- this is very good

[Sophy Freebirds]

I would like to ape Divya and you" wall of plastered promises-"- stunning lines :)
Trembling foundations- weak and delicate.Torched the bed in"emotions stream roller"- all the emotions is put to this line.The next line is vividly describing how you desperately try to hold onto something which is so fickle.A giant holding unto the twig for salvation in the flood. Another exquisite piece Freida.Your ability to coin phrases is just MIND- BOGGLING!! .. I had tried desperately to hold onto someone but everything fell apart. Pathetic.. ha.. so it was relateable

~Sophy