Sun's dim betrayal...

Sun's dim betrayal...

A Poem by Frieda P
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_placating shadows_

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Rushing towards 
         placating shadows,
resolved in empty
               hushes' recessed corners
strangling in translation,
light shatters
                        prism's safety
   blindly perplexed
             in shade's hazy view,
frozen memories
          thawed to embers
  digging in the ash
                to remember,
how the gleam led
                to such dark detours
   when windows of reason
       abruptly closed
moments of sanity seem to
             trickle down,
dancing faster
               to catch up with dawn,
closed my eyes in shallow
        depth's recall, 
  asylum harbors
           taunting deceptions
   setting fire to denial's 
                   flared up insides,
                blistering under a sun's
                              dim betrayal

© 2014 Frieda P


Author's Note

Frieda P


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first let me say, what an awesome damn song.. I haven't ever heard it before.. oh wow... I love it... get lost in the beat, then she starts singing and holy hell.. ooooh yes...

ok, on to your writing... girl... you took me on a downward spiral, that seduced me lower and lower... shadows seducing me from the darkness.. cooling contrasts from the sweltering heat... beckoning me to quench what my soul desires... too bad once I give in, I see the betrayal... but what a ride...

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

redzone

9 Years Ago

Sharp claws.. er.. nails. Frieda, April!!?? HA!! I never would have guessed... nope, never. :-p. H.. read more
Frieda P

9 Years Ago

Only when absolutely necessary, or for fun!! haha ;)
AprilRN1210

9 Years Ago

well hey there! yea... watch out for her claws... apparently i don't though. haha.. not going there .. read more



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What a web of words you can weave, pulling the reader in deeper and deeper. Sometimes I have to read a few times to get some semblance of sense as the short lines break up my thinking. Well woven again, spider woman.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

9 Years Ago

Ha 'spider woman' made me laugh, thanks so much, I just like to keep you on your poetic toes Noel. ... read more
Amazing singer and your words...well they resonate with me. Without light there would be no shadows...but sometimes its that very light that hurts us the most. Shadows can comfort..we can hide our innermost pain in then. We may even feel our safest there. Under the sun we are fully exposed and vulnerable. x

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

redflutterby

9 Years Ago

Even in my insanity I have my moments of clarity....x
Frieda P

9 Years Ago

Lucky you.....xo
redflutterby

9 Years Ago

Pffftttt....ain't no luck here hun...x
I love it! You have presented it so well. My favourite lines would be:
"digging in the ash
                to remember,
how the gleam led
                to such dark detours"
In my library!

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

9 Years Ago

Thanks again Moon, muchly appreciated!
you are the Mistress of "run on" and contradiction .. each and every word you choose deliberately .. at least thats the feel i get .. i have never been able to read your poetry just once .. it demands my attention .. and open mind ... this one is no exception ... you just get better at it ;)
we want .. no we need the healing .. only to be denied .. and the sifting .. the endless sifting past fires for answers ... only finding the same pain and anguish .. what a beautiful, beautiful sadness :(
E.

Posted 9 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

9 Years Ago

oh baby .. you have not saddled up behind mine! ... you better hold on tight ;)
Frieda P

9 Years Ago

Frisky for a Thursday, aren't ya E? ;) haha
Einstein Noodle

9 Years Ago

friskier still on Freiday ... ;)
Only you can make dark and angry sound so beautiful.
Sometimes, I think we should just swear off men.
But then, we do kind of need them and they're not ALL bad.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

9 Years Ago

What a luverly thing to say on both counts Ana Sophia. :)
This has such a dark feel to it my Lady. Disappointment, sadness and angst flows in shallow, folorn bitterness across this page.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

9 Years Ago

Bitter, not so much, more like pissed off as bloody hell....thanks John. :)
first let me say, what an awesome damn song.. I haven't ever heard it before.. oh wow... I love it... get lost in the beat, then she starts singing and holy hell.. ooooh yes...

ok, on to your writing... girl... you took me on a downward spiral, that seduced me lower and lower... shadows seducing me from the darkness.. cooling contrasts from the sweltering heat... beckoning me to quench what my soul desires... too bad once I give in, I see the betrayal... but what a ride...

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

redzone

9 Years Ago

Sharp claws.. er.. nails. Frieda, April!!?? HA!! I never would have guessed... nope, never. :-p. H.. read more
Frieda P

9 Years Ago

Only when absolutely necessary, or for fun!! haha ;)
AprilRN1210

9 Years Ago

well hey there! yea... watch out for her claws... apparently i don't though. haha.. not going there .. read more

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If you want to know me, read my poetry, it's all in there. I am a mother of three sons (my finest moments) a sister, a survivor and a little bit crazy. I lost my beloved sister to suicide, so you'll.. more..

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