~ celestial circumnavigation COLLABORATION~April & Frieda

~ celestial circumnavigation COLLABORATION~April & Frieda

A Poem by Frieda P




Sullen butterfly angel,
            in darkly chained wings
  her thirst for freedom
 never quenched,
 her cravings unqualified for flight
   desiring to soar high above the constellations
 planted in a world of woes & dread instead
  black raven, 
        her only ally in silence's gloomy prayer
             paying for the sins of the father,
 mystic moonlight’s melody
          aims to soothe her soul
  yet somber shadows obscure
   spirit’s faint flicker of hope
           dying from destiny’s betrayal,
 made a wish upon an imploding star
   in hopes of redemption's surrender,
   earth stood its ground
 in her kaleidoscopic reflection,
  stillness within the gravitational pull 
 of anguished atonement
abandoning resignations of despair
 on murky ideations of lifetimes past,
 contemplating celestial circumnavigation
  delegating fate’s intervention
as the symbiotic crow flies in retrospect,
cawing feverishly
                   in sympathetic adulation 


© 2014 Frieda P


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Frieda P

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I've interrupted my own writing, not to mention my boycotting of this site, to be one of the first (for there will be many) to congratulate you two on an absolute masterpiece...tipsiness and two insanely-talented poets are apparently the recipe for a perfect collaboration ;P I'm not surprised in the least...I knew it was only a matter of time before you two misfits put your heads together for just such an occasion ;)

But as soon as I turn my attention to the poem itself, it ceases to be a collab in my mind...your voices were destined for poetic harmony...I knew that they would compliment each other sublimely when I first found out that this was happening...I see, hear, and feel both of you in this piece, but I think it would spoil the fun to point out exactly which elements of each of you I detect haha I'll just say that your combined personalities have meshed in a poignant and powerful piece of poetic bliss...I'm not going to cite certain lines or get into the business of dissecting it...everyone will have their favourite bits for sure...I will simply sit back and marvel at the beauty of my two best friends coming together to compose a piece that just commands the respect of every reader that approaches it...I can't tell you how proud I am of you two for accomplishing this...I was gonna suggest a group hug, but then I thought, no, this is your moment...enjoy it...I know that everyone who reads it will do the same :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

9 Years Ago

Yay, Benji got featured review. :)
AprilRN1210

9 Years Ago

I see that... awesome!! he deserves it... so sweet... loved every word:)
kublakhan27

9 Years Ago

Haha Glad you enjoyed the review girls, and thank you for the group hug ;) It's featured now but I d.. read more



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A quite simply brilliant collaboration, I'd never have guessed you were drunk at the time haha, even though you talk straight off of thirst and quenching this one goes straight to my library.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

9 Years Ago

Ha see, he knew it was you too...LOL
AprilRN1210

9 Years Ago

Lmao!!!! You two!!!! Hey!!
R Smith

9 Years Ago

Hey you!! I see that glass in your hand.....again!! hahahahahahahahaha
I've interrupted my own writing, not to mention my boycotting of this site, to be one of the first (for there will be many) to congratulate you two on an absolute masterpiece...tipsiness and two insanely-talented poets are apparently the recipe for a perfect collaboration ;P I'm not surprised in the least...I knew it was only a matter of time before you two misfits put your heads together for just such an occasion ;)

But as soon as I turn my attention to the poem itself, it ceases to be a collab in my mind...your voices were destined for poetic harmony...I knew that they would compliment each other sublimely when I first found out that this was happening...I see, hear, and feel both of you in this piece, but I think it would spoil the fun to point out exactly which elements of each of you I detect haha I'll just say that your combined personalities have meshed in a poignant and powerful piece of poetic bliss...I'm not going to cite certain lines or get into the business of dissecting it...everyone will have their favourite bits for sure...I will simply sit back and marvel at the beauty of my two best friends coming together to compose a piece that just commands the respect of every reader that approaches it...I can't tell you how proud I am of you two for accomplishing this...I was gonna suggest a group hug, but then I thought, no, this is your moment...enjoy it...I know that everyone who reads it will do the same :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

9 Years Ago

Yay, Benji got featured review. :)
AprilRN1210

9 Years Ago

I see that... awesome!! he deserves it... so sweet... loved every word:)
kublakhan27

9 Years Ago

Haha Glad you enjoyed the review girls, and thank you for the group hug ;) It's featured now but I d.. read more
wahooooo!!! awesome ma'am.... we did good for two inebriated gals... lol

I LOVE the way it turned out!!! so much fun working with you.... it flows beautifully!! what a great idea ma'am... will collab with you ANYTIME!!!

high five:)

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Woody

9 Years Ago

I meant it as a compliment. I hope I didn't put my foot in my mouth.
Frieda P

9 Years Ago

Why, that's common practice around here...I'm sure she took it as a compliment. :)
AprilRN1210

9 Years Ago

I took it as one!! heck yea!! no worries about me... I loved it actually, made me giggle:)

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