Jedi mind tricks

toe curling,

 tendril sweeping,

    mind dipping

Jedi mind tricks,

  kaleidoscopic tilting 

   of your tiding's 

          persuasive sway

swept away

                by trickles ebb & flow, 

bated breath's

surrendering in

 caresses of

   flesh-tone weepings 

   as inky effusion's

               drip in offerings,

seeping onto

                  volcanic blank pages

   in deliverance's

                        safekeeping

Author's Note

Reviews

[writing mojo]

some defined forces here, not sure of the star wars connection, (said my childhood), but the mature nature in space does ignites more then my lightsaber. I like the shards of wordy jenga here..pieces to put together in towering writer dotting and connecting skit row rhythms to enthralling skin as inspiration..good piece

[Frieda P]

Laughing here, 'ignites more than your lightsaber'...oh the imagery. Thanks so much mojo. :)

[redzone]

hmmmm... but Frieda, where in the "Empire" is the "safe keeping"??? if toes are curling, why would anyone want to be safe?? besides if you are using that jedi stuff, that mind altering trickery, who could resist... I guess the only thing left to say is, "yes, my master"... er.. stop Frieda, you already had me at "toe"...

redzone

[Jeff]

I see where you're going with this. Excellent work here!

[Gypsy Warrior Queen]

those jedi mind tricks just keep coming and coming and coming ........never gets old:)

[Bright Ocean Star]

the outline of this fantastic poem reminds me of the teenage mutant ninja turtles. Was that planned?

[Tai Ryens]

Sounds like your saying exactly what he wants you to, effectively masking the dark tone of the poem. Well done.

[ANM]

Toes curling... Should have took the tights off !! Lovely little poem bravo.

[DIVYA]

Loved the playfulness and the seductiveness...the concluding lines are awesome poetry!

as inky effusion's

drip in offerings,

seeping onto

volcanic blank pages

in deliverance's

safekeeping


A beautiful and inspiring write Frieda.

[Avinash]

You drift readers to a dreamland which you create with your magical words almost like a criminal ;) and we can't complain :)

[Gypsy Warrior Queen]

So, her flames burn in those jedi mind tricks! Lol you are such a seductress! Whoop whoop HEAT!

[Einstein Noodle]

what can i say .. i love your stuff honey! its like tumbling over cotton and volcanic rock .. i must confess your Jedi mind tricks work on me :)
E.
ps .. absolutely stuck on "volcanic blank pages" ..simply tantric baby!