Jedi mind tricks

Jedi mind tricks

A Poem by Frieda P

toe curling,
 tendril sweeping,
    mind dipping
Jedi mind tricks,
  kaleidoscopic tilting 
   of your tiding's 
          persuasive sway
swept away
                by trickles ebb & flow, 
bated breath's
surrendering in
 caresses of
   flesh-tone weepings 
   as inky effusion's
               drip in offerings,
seeping onto
                  volcanic blank pages
   in deliverance's

© 2014 Frieda P

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some defined forces here, not sure of the star wars connection, (said my childhood), but the mature nature in space does ignites more then my lightsaber. I like the shards of wordy jenga here..pieces to put together in towering writer dotting and connecting skit row rhythms to enthralling skin as inspiration..good piece

Posted 8 Years Ago

3 of 3 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

8 Years Ago

Laughing here, 'ignites more than your lightsaber'...oh the imagery. Thanks so much mojo. :)


hmmmm... but Frieda, where in the "Empire" is the "safe keeping"??? if toes are curling, why would anyone want to be safe?? besides if you are using that jedi stuff, that mind altering trickery, who could resist... I guess the only thing left to say is, "yes, my master"... er.. stop Frieda, you already had me at "toe"...


Posted 6 Years Ago

I see where you're going with this. Excellent work here!

Posted 7 Years Ago

those jedi mind tricks just keep coming and coming and coming ........never gets old:)

Posted 8 Years Ago

the outline of this fantastic poem reminds me of the teenage mutant ninja turtles. Was that planned?

Posted 8 Years Ago

Sounds like your saying exactly what he wants you to, effectively masking the dark tone of the poem. Well done.

Posted 8 Years Ago

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Toes curling... Should have took the tights off !! Lovely little poem bravo.

Posted 8 Years Ago

Loved the playfulness and the seductiveness...the concluding lines are awesome poetry!

as inky effusion's

drip in offerings,

seeping onto

volcanic blank pages

in deliverance's


A beautiful and inspiring write Frieda.

Posted 8 Years Ago

You drift readers to a dreamland which you create with your magical words almost like a criminal ;) and we can't complain :)

Posted 8 Years Ago

So, her flames burn in those jedi mind tricks! Lol you are such a seductress! Whoop whoop HEAT!

Posted 8 Years Ago

what can i say .. i love your stuff honey! its like tumbling over cotton and volcanic rock .. i must confess your Jedi mind tricks work on me :)
ps .. absolutely stuck on "volcanic blank pages" ..simply tantric baby!

Posted 8 Years Ago

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Added on August 29, 2014
Last Updated on August 29, 2014


Frieda P
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