read 'tween the lines

Take each sentiment,

     twist at your own discretion

  a cathartic inquisition

   can grasp timely translations,

  bend them aptly to suit your

           own disaster's rhyme

  turns on a dime in 

           perspectives's intuition,

  everybody knows the

     ideas are simply overstated 

       and liberally conjugated 

   words read surreptitiously

          'tween the paraphrased lines

  aimless paths amidst seaweed petals

                  & wildflower drifts

   where horizons breathe to expand,

       & rush meets lush tranquility's rhythm

Reviews

[redzone]

ah ha, a philosophical poem from you Frieda... And music too, "I got nothing left to prove... to you" "a wildflower"...

I liked the feel of these words as I read them, they were like a "daisy in as field of roses" (from the song), or "wildflower drifts" (your words, which I found nicely "conjugated" by the way)... even in poetry, metaphor and image, there is reality, and it is either true or not, someone has twisted the meaning and intent of your words... hopefully I have not done this with this poem Frieda, missed the point...

you don't have to read between the lines to know that "wildflowers (and their drift)" are beautiful because they are "wild"... anyway, you know sometimes I go all over the place as I read your poetry Frieda...

[Frieda P]

Doing the happy dance to your sweet words Curt....

[Einstein Noodle]

sometimes between the lines is all one has ... sometimes very important .. sometimes doesn't really exist at all ..
and you have made a sublime but dramatic statement of readers foible #23 if you want to read your own story in a poem ..write it ;)
then i love you more because you are self effacing
"everybody knows the
ideas are simply overstated
and liberally conjugated"

then you give me a wonderful no in between place were wildflower drifts as sea weed waves in the tide ... i got stuck there ... i like it there ... its like ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh! you move me :)
enjoyed your poem very much
E.

[Frieda P]

Woo doing the happy dance, all this and hot rocks too. ;) MWAH!

[Einstein Noodle]

nothing like the happy dance .. so glad! nice tune as well.. i just now watched the video .. reminds me of Joni mitchell .. only modern ;)

[MomzillaNC]

Is this your answer to MusicaMania's challenge in our group? It's terrific. So delightfully ambiguous, but purely penned inspiration. Be sure to post your answers to the challenges on the group page too!

[Frieda P]

No, just something that was looming in my head for a while, thanks Momzilla.

[MomzillaNC]

Well, it works for the challenge too! Sweet!

[Coyote Poetry]

Thank you for introducing me to the good music. I added her to my favorite. I loved how you used the words. Beautiful use of thoughts led the reader to something to think about. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Frieda P]

Jazz'd you enjoyed John, she's new to me too, thanks so much for your kind words my friend.

[Coyote Poetry]

I liked her voice also. Always a pleasure to read your thoughts.

[R Smith]

Read between the lines huh! ok let's have a look...................................................................................................................................................................................yep! I see it, its your shopping list for dinner tonight!!!maybe I'm a bit shallow I guess but I do love your work dear, hope you are ok :)

[Frieda P]

Ha did I leave that in there, I meant to edit that part out, you're a loon hon....but a cute one. ;) Grazie mille....

[R Smith]

Aw! thanks babe, your so cute too, much love and a bag of peas please :)

[Fran Marie]

Extraordinary....everyone interprets writings differently, it may vary from the writer's intentions.nevertheless it is what the reader gleans from the piece...and feels the effect..like the wildflower drift where horizons breathe to expand...love that

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much Fran, jazz'd you enjoyed this one....

[Briana O'Connor]

Ok so please don't hate me. In my defense I was watching some random guy on tv attempt to rap, but I think your poem would work much better as one :P In all seriousness, I found this truly engaging. The words flowed with poetic elegancy. True emotional sentiment lay in your words. I really enjoyed this. Hope my sillyness doesn't offend you. I get like that when I stay up past my bed time... :D

[Frieda P]

I can't rap, I can't sing...period. You would really be giggling @ me then. Thanks so much for your visit and review.

[Briana O'Connor]

lol neither can i, but i pretend i can :P

[Frieda P]

You're still giggly, still no sleep? haha

[Briana O'Connor]

I got a few hours...:D

[Frieda P]

Apparently not enough lol

[Briana O'Connor]

sleep is for squares :D

[BennyBooth]

I love reading poems and interpreting the way I do. I know that I may not always get the message, or the idea the writer set out to achieve, but I don't blame a writer for that, I blame the way I read.

I thoroughly enjoy your crafty writing. I also enjoy the little extra's like the song...so wonderful...I hope that one day my writing can flourish and be something as gracious as yours my friend.

Thank you for this wonderful poem.... :)

[Frieda P]

Sometimes the poet doesn't even know where they're going, I think that's the real beauty of poetry, it flows and we're the grand recipients of words, no matter how we decipher them, thanks so much Benny. :)

[writing mojo]

we can wear many mask when we write..it's the ones that intrigue the most that have peeking reflective interpretations of what hides beneath...I love this and the jarring effect phonically incites the reader to keep going on all the way to the end, like the words "surreptitiously and "aimless paths amidst seaweed petals & wildflower drifts"..which have a big picture origin from something that keeps growing and going... you invite the reader to connect to your verbal well of knowledge which is a soothing finality to the spirited ending human found placement in nature alignment leads to peace.. excellent

[Frieda P]

Thanks mojo, for your ever poetic reviews, brought a huge smile to my face....

[kublakhan27]

Sick people are not supposed to write this good Mrs.R...I don't know how you do this, but judging by the swift responses to it, I am clearly not alone in that belief...it sounds like the gripe of a poet whose work is interpreted in every possible way except the way the poet had in mind...well, it's a conundrum really cuz you want people to interpret things in many different ways...but when you've got a message that you desperately want to get across, and nobody notices, it's hard on the psyche...

where horizons breathe to expand,
& rush meets lush tranquility's rhythm...wow, I am not worthy...amazing work love, just amazing :) xo

[Frieda P]

Sick in the head you mean? That made me laugh Benji, thanks...I had this one waiting in the wings, I did write one when I was down with the bug but it's very strange...thanks, you always make my poetic heart smile sweetie. xo

[kublakhan27]

Haha Yeah, which probably means it's a masterpiece ;) Always a pleasure love, your imagination is something to behold...I think I need you to breathe on me, and for once, I'm not saying that in a bawdy sense haha...xo

[Frieda P]

Oh you don't want me to do that dear, it's 24 hours of sheer torture, but there are a few I'd love to breathe on ha :)

[kublakhan27]

Haha Maybe so, but I might catch some of your imagination in the process ;)

[Frieda P]

Um...don't make me go there Dali, I'm still weak, but you'll still suffer. ;)

[kublakhan27]

Haha My lips are sealed...I can't speak for my pen though ;)