A Thought For Those To Care

A Thought For Those To Care

A Poem by Friks

Kids


Kids who are not my kids.

Kids who are not a consequential product of my actions.

Kids who are just kids.


Kids 

Newcomers to this thing, the machine.

This perpetual motion in a gallery  of existence.

A place wherein we are becoming portraits, paintings hung on the walls.


Kids

They have to look up at us and learn.

No need for respect,"this is for yourself" I say.

One cannot have respect for a picture in a frame! 'They don't listen to us! They don't feel our pain.'

Respect comes when you learn what they tried to teach you, it always seems too late...

If only kids would listen and not leave their lives to fate.


Kids

Something spat out of the mouth of a thing so real it is the only thing that will ever be to you.

They stumble on a wreckage in their infancy, oblivious to its perils, absorbing what is, for what should be...

They look upon these paintings as the blueprints for a future they cannot yet see.


Kids

Kids who are my kids.

Kids who are a consequential product of my actions.

Kids who are just kids.


They have no choice.

We made them, they are born, and then they have to live.

Did we take that choice away? Or was it never there?

Are we here because we have to be? Or because someone didn't care?


Kids 

They are just kids.

Don't be so unfair.

Remember that if they had a choice, they might not have been here.

© 2011 Friks


Author's Note

Friks
This piece is very metaphorical and carries a message with underlying meaning other than just that of being cruel to kids, it carries a message that means to say that we who are responsible for bringing kids into this world aught to take greater care as to how we live and what we provide these children with. It is easy to have a kid! But is it fair when that child will have to stumble over all our inadequacies and mistakes, will have to build a life out of nothing more than the modern bare necessities of staying alive? Where is the progress? Please tell me what you think! :D

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I think you pose, poetically, some valid points of how people view kids. I would say that I would like to see a little more diversity in the presentation of your thoughts. Perhaps how kids see themselves, how adults see them, and then how they SHOULD be seen. Your last line almost leaves a cliff hanger that gives you an opportunity to write on the fact that they didn't ask to be here. Great effort in expression.

Posted 13 Years Ago


simply brillant! I really like this, I agree with this write.

Posted 14 Years Ago


ahh, so good. i loved the last stanza, and i agree that people shouldnt be so harsh. Let kids, be kids because once you're older you'll regret not having your childhood. Im always happy with you writes, great job.

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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ouch!! its great!! but seems to me a tad suicidal like..? but i understand.. for example.. children in poverty, or slaves =/

xx

Posted 14 Years Ago



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Friks
Friks

Pretoria, Gauteng, South Africa



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