WINDS

ITS MY FIRST POEM HERE ,HOPE U LIKE IT

Winds
winds come by,
from here and there ........
Measure it
before dealing with its strength.


See how fast it goes,
so you will know
where to go
and when to slow....


regard your space in it
before crossing your limit

Weight your load
before facing the storm
Check what you know
before playing any role


Be sure of what it is full of
before being close or being far

If you have faced its kind before
do expect almost the same result

When a wind that you like
passes without touching your parts

Save your move and stand tight

its hard to be thrown
an injured bird is easy to be caught

When winds come....
Some things stand others do fly
Once you fly..
ANY WIND WILL DIRECT YOUR LIFE

Some winds are to heal
like the one of the spring
stay close to it
when peace is completely missing

Author's Note

DON'T HESITATE IN PLACING UR COMMENTS

Reviews

[JayceeC]

The last stanza is the best part of this. I know you've used these first lines elsewhere, but it really has a lot of peace and summarized the essence of this entire write for you.

Be sure of what is full of
before being close or being far

These lines are a bit awkwardly phrased. I know what you mean, but they are not saying it in quite the right way and it interrupts the flow of your writing. I am struggling to give you a specific way to change except to take the easy way and add "it" after "What" so that the line reads correctly. Every description I think of right now is too harsh sounding for you poem full of soft sibilance and vowel sounds. This is just some thoughts on this, although I hate to reword and restructure work, especially my older work and will understand if you do not care to make changes. jc

[highthought]

Yes sure I ll add it as u said ..u know having someone to live with the thoughts of ur writing gives more power for the topic u re writing about especially when no coming intrest as what happen very often in living life which we are all in ..so writing could be an ascape from bluffing and cheating and others

[Josie E. Cook M. A.]

This is nice in that last stanza, but your flow is interrupted in some places like the part that JayeeC mentioned--I agree with her on this because the meaning is there, but the wording is awkward and causes the reader to stop or hit a snag here. I think you could rework this to make it clear and flow well.
The capitalization should be used at a minimum because it represents shouting or loudness in text.
Use it for emphasis only, and don't overuse it--like the (!) mark it is to be used sparely.
Some of this is very repetitive in meaning in the beginning stanzas. You could cut some and add some other reflections on your subject and title.

[highthought]

thank u josie for the benefit that i ll get from ur words and i ll work on it

[Josie E. Cook M. A.]

You are welcome! :)
PS--I revise mine constantly by reading them over and over. Listening to the vowels and combinations.

[highthought]

Some changes has been done as u asked ....after all two writers like u and Jaycee asked for the same thing ...and. Also I agree though .....guess a lot of work is in head as far as my work is concerned ...don't know if u can bear it lol ...will go slowly on that maybe a poem per month lol

[Willard Wells]

Thank you first for directing me too this. I love the feel. It gives me imagery and the feelings that I have had on boats sailing as a guest and to me it is the most perfect feelings I have had right up there with love and happiness. Being on the water to me is one of those perfect states of bliz.

Thank you for letting me have that feeling through your words.

[highthought]

What are we without feel ..sometimes words remind u with it and also remind u what u can give ....words like yours Willard..thank you

[KWP]

and the winds of life will flow on - how many of us will learn how to navigate the so we learn to float in any breeze offered .. you poem is full of underlying insights ... I like it although I think I would have liked it even more if I felt that it wasn't a 'telling' poem and more words that can nestle in one's soul X

[highthought]

Yes u re right it is a telling ..I thought of that while writing it , then I said to myself I am going to swim in huge sea just to catch up all ideas in one single poem , so imade up my mind and here it is .i felt that readers won't mind since there a lot in it

[KWP]

:) Nice attitude ... XX

[Olivia Marie]

Favorite line: "an injured bird is easy to be caught"
Very nice :) I enjoyed reading it, and it wasn't what I expected. :) I loved it!

[dreaming dame]

NO hesitation. Kay, when you told me of this poem, I thought that maybe you just wanted a review, but I really do like this. A lot. so much of this I can feel with. I'd quote my favorite lines, but they all are:) Amazing write

[Jasmine Thousand]

Honestly, I didn't expect it to be this good. But it was...amazing. I loved the flow and wisdom, it's a really beautiful poem! :)
Note-You might want to change ur to your. It disturbed the almost magical flow ever so slightly. :D

[highthought]

we all chose what to do ..

[anne p. murray- LadeeAn..]

Very straight forward wizdom; well versed, flowing. Your metaphoric use of "wind" is relative in evaluating perceptions and visions of life and it's meanings. Every individual has their own concepts...but in the end. we all pretty much agree to insights that come thru by way of pen, paper and heart
"Does this make sense".. :-)

[?]

HMMMMM, yes people and things (the winds in our lives) can influence our lives in so many ways. We can be tossed to and fro, and then yes there are some winds that come in our lives that help us, heal us, comfort us when the peace is missing, till we find it again.

Very nice thought pattern here