Catch me when I fall

Catch me when I fall

A Poem by Lillian
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A song I wrote for my boyfriend

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Hearing your voice,
It takes me off the ledge

It takes me to a safer place

Where I can breathe.

I can exhale all my troubles.

I can Exhale all my fears.
I can release all my anger.

I can release all my tears.

When I am at the edge of the chair

With death around my neck,

I will call you to my side

To lift away the danger.

With you:
I can exhale all my troubles.

I can Exhale all my fears.
I can release all my anger.

I can release all my tears.
 


 

Seeing your face

You give me hope.

You make me strong.
And I know I can make it. 

I will release my pain.

I will break down the wall.

I know I can do this.
I know you will catch me when I fall.

© 2008 Lillian


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Again, a meaningful piece, Lillian. Can I suggest you take out the two "It" in the first stanza? I think it would read smoother if you did. Also, you have 'exhale' capialized in the middle of a sentence in two stanzas. If that's intentional, can you explain the reason for it?

Thanks - T'SaS

Posted 13 Years Ago


Catchy beat to it...great write, too!

Posted 13 Years Ago


Blazingly powerful!
Your way with words is so hypnotizing.
This truly took my breath and made my heart sing.
To be saved. To be loved.
Above all else?
To be safe.
You've expressed something I long for.
Beautiful!

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

you know i will always catch you no matter what

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This made me smile. It's amazing because in this poem I learned as much about you as I learned about your boyfriend. You have a lot of hurt, fear and passion (as we all) and you feel safe with your boyfriend who is strong enough and secure enough for you to feel comfortable in being yourself and letting go of all that build up hurt and pain. He sounds like a great guy.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Such a sweet and lovely song! I bet it made your boyfriend blush!
Great words, that made it such a memorable read!

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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