Bare feet two ways

Bare feet two ways

A Poem by Lox
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An entry for the contest ''Dear Heart''. A simple story of walking from the past and present.

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The path I tread is rough
I lay here bare feet
I wish I could go back
Change things, a tad bit

I walk forward
Two paths lie ahead
One goes back, one goes forward
How am I misled?

If I go forward bare feet
I can tolerate no longer
A break, yes a break!
Let us choose the former

Right back at the start
The path is new and smooth
My bare feet, comfy, unhurt
I see.. perhaps, I could?

Enjoy this repeat
I can! I shall! I will!
I've longed for comfort
Oh yes how surreal

This path I once travelled
These diversions I once chose
I can enjoy with my feet
Which yield firm soles

Now given the chance
I'd change to paths less rough
And strive a comfy road
Surely suffered enough

Time and time again
I chose the best path
And yet the road still roughens
My bare feet even rants

To have even chosen what's best
To have enjoyed a changed past
Leads to an inevitable future
Another regret born at last

The path I tread is rough
I lay here bare feet
I wish I could go back
Change things, a tad bit

© 2020 Lox


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I love your use of the symbol of bare feet, suggesting we are babes in the woods, inexperienced & raw to the things that bombard us in life. I love that you are consistent in using the bare feet metaphor, stretching it into an extended metaphor thru-out your entire poem. I love the way your observations are a bit simple & not too deep, at first, but your poem feels like it's gathering passion as you go along, until toward the end you express more & more deeply about how it feels to be on this path (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

One tiny correction . . . "less rougher" should be "less rough"

Posted 1 Year Ago


Lox

1 Year Ago

Oh yeaaahhhh haha thank you for that. Now that I've read it its been bothering me thank you for your.. read more
this is so meaningful. Pls. allow me to use it for my instagram post caption.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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Lox

1 Year Ago

Oh wow sure. Could you send me a link to your insta post so I could see? Kinda wanna know how it fee.. read more
amethyst1998

11 Months Ago

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We choose which direction we wish to travel, but we can never be certain if that path will be trouble free. In life we encounter both the rough as well as the smooth. We gave to learn to navigate both.

Chris

Posted 1 Year Ago


yes, so meaningful. navigating our walk through life is difficult and the paths we choose are not always easy

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lox

1 Year Ago

Glad you found my work meaningful. Hey if its not much, can I review some of your works? Is there an.. read more
Ana Papaya

1 Year Ago

Hi, you are welcome and yes, feel free to browse!
Feedback always appreciated!
I can relate to this piece so much. There were times when I used to think of going back to the past only to change some choices I made that messed me up. But now I am happy that I made those mistakes and I enjoy thinking about them. Because I think these wrong choices make you stronger for present and for future. You have penned down the journey beautifully. Big thumbs up!

Posted 1 Year Ago


Lox

1 Year Ago

Thanks for the review moog, appreciate your input on my work. I would also like to grow as a writer,.. read more
moog-drika

1 Year Ago

that's quite a difficult job. I would rather suggest you click on the write that interests you. ^_^ .. read more
in the end, the most satisfaction might be felt by taking the tougher path and surviving with body, mind and heart still intact.
I really like how you use slant rhyme in this, really good effect.
j.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Looking back, one would indeed change so much. Faith turns to doubt. The conflict is constant. Very well expressed.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I wish i could go back and change things in my past as well. nicely written

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lox

1 Year Ago

Thanks for reviewing my work. If its alright, can I review some of your work as well? Do you have an.. read more
Just Kim

1 Year Ago

just read whatever you like
This reminds me of Robert Frost's The Road Not Taken. I enjoyed this journey. It made me reflect upon mine. Good job.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lox

1 Year Ago

Hey! I know that too! Thank you for your review. If you would like me to review one of your pieces I.. read more
lakki

1 Year Ago

Lol. I don't do reviews to get ones in return. :)
Lox

1 Year Ago

Ah no sorry If I made you think that's what I'm getting at. Let me rephrase it, can I review your wo.. read more

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Added on June 11, 2020
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Tags: Travel, Time, Regret, Memory, Rejoice

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Lox
Lox

Batangas, Philippines



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