Winter Cabin

Winter Cabin

A Poem by Lox
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A submission for the "TEN WORD CONTEST"

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The wind blows a chilling breeze
As I REST within a blissful warmth
Born from the flames of burning fuel
I lay here TIRED, snug at last

Squint my eyes, awake from slumber
An apparent winter, the WINDOW shows
Uncover my blanket, wield my SWEATER
Outside the ROOM, away he goes

I brace myself, my clothes still WARM
Clasp my hands, my breath so FOGGY
I stand outside, my CHEEKS rose RED
This beautiful glace, I've lived to see

Behind me, my cabin clad in the woods
Built with effort, not BIG but thorough
Exist in the cold, this frigid life
I was born in winter, a child of snow

© 2020 Lox


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I agree with Christine's evaluation. you made a meaningful adaptation from the Ten Words.
Although it is exciting to Place in a contest, I stopped doing Word Prompts, in favor of choosing my words when writing. "Their Words" are empty until we fill them with meaning. Once the selected words are integrated into a writing we have no need to continue. I prefer to allow (the writing) to determine where it should end, and what words fit best with the other words.

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lox

1 Month Ago

I feel the same way! The only reason I joined said contest is that lately I've been lacking inspirat.. read more
VALORMORE DE PLUME

1 Month Ago

Understandable. Blessings and good tidings.



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this reminds of Thoreau...he would have liked this...the simplicity of the cabin, the blanket, the sweater, the warmth among the cold...."a cabin clad in woods" is a great line.
a heart staying tepid within a cold woods...like a baby in a womb.
I agree with previous comments...I am not a fan of these kinds of contests...but somehow you made this work without it sounding like you forced the ten words into it.
j.

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jacob erin-cilberto

1 Month Ago

Not that many, but a few....Most states between here and Maine...having come from the East.
Lox

1 Month Ago

Do you inspire some of your works from these few travels?
jacob erin-cilberto

1 Month Ago

that might be true, but everyday life gives me my inspiration the most...
relationships of th.. read more
Cabins certainly are comfortable in the winter and not in the summer because of bugs. Very nice decriptions.

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lox

1 Month Ago

Thanks for the review JungLee, may I also check out your works? Is there anything you'd recommend?
I agree with Christine's evaluation. you made a meaningful adaptation from the Ten Words.
Although it is exciting to Place in a contest, I stopped doing Word Prompts, in favor of choosing my words when writing. "Their Words" are empty until we fill them with meaning. Once the selected words are integrated into a writing we have no need to continue. I prefer to allow (the writing) to determine where it should end, and what words fit best with the other words.

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lox

1 Month Ago

I feel the same way! The only reason I joined said contest is that lately I've been lacking inspirat.. read more
VALORMORE DE PLUME

1 Month Ago

Understandable. Blessings and good tidings.
Did you get to choose the words or were they chosen for you? Whatever the answer Lox your Winter Cabin was a delight to read. I am a child of winter too. Born in February, just before spring awakenings.

Chris

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lox

1 Month Ago

Ah yes the ones capitalized are the words required for the contest. Thought it'd be challenging to b.. read more
Christine Anne Shaw

1 Month Ago

It doesn't matter. You have put your own unique stamp on your poem :)

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Added on July 2, 2020
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Lox
Lox

Batangas, Philippines



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