Observer

This is my attempt at our MuSe's challenge at Hair of the Dog.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

I have a tale I’d like to tell

Of two lost souls…I knew them well.

They walked the earth in dead of night

As neither one could face the light.

 

They preyed upon naïve mankind

And took life’s blood of all they’d find.

They were alike in many ways

Yet did not share philosophies.

 

The endless arguments they had

On right and wrong may sound quite mad…

Each thought the other’s means to death

A grotesque way to steal man’s breath.

 

     “You quaff their blood, disgusting drink,

       Until your ruby eyes are ink,

       And then you toss the corpse aside

       Such blatant waste I can’t abide!”

 

              “Better to leave it to be threshed

               Than feed upon the filthy flesh!

               I drink the wine that makes me strong

               And keeps me looking fine and young.”

 

They argued thus each time they met,

And never spoke of devil’s debt.

Phantasmic I observed unseen..

As spirit I know what it means

 

     To leave my human corpse behind

     And take my soul to peace beyond

     While they continue causing dread

     Among the mortals... walk undead.

 

G. K. Bostic

3rd Place

 

Author's Note

For OnTap #5

Reviews

[HB]

Cute. ^.^

[Brad]

now this is a work of art

[Robin]

oh how my imagination played in perfect step with the flow from your pen ~

eerieness in perfect doses

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

gad I adore your flawless rhythm throughout~ this is poetic story telling at its best mastered craft~ I grew up with rhymes~ Petofi Sandor's Janos Vitez (John The Valiant) was my childhood mentor toward the written form of tale spinning~ wondrous~ you take me back to fairy tale days in the hours after dusk~ gorgeous!

[KAREN]

Excellent job! Love the ryhme and the flow!

[OT]

ooo chilling write - the couplets give an even more creepy sing song feel to it!! and the conversation ha macabre but brilliant - waste not want not? they could just share the bodies I guess? grim! but true! haha nice write!!!

[MuSe Ampoule]

Ooooh Nice!! Eerie and clever! I can smell the graveyard dust from this.

I'm actually glad you did this piece this way, because when I was cursing myself over this prompt one of the ideas I had was to discuss the ethics of waste in that the vamp will toss aside the vessel once sated but the zombie will consume the flesh leaving less refuse. I dunno...couldn't figure out which recycling bin to throw the corpse so I went another route. This is better than what I was able to come up with (before I tossed the topic and went the scifi trifecta). Well done!