Seducer666

His words spilled out upon the page

Like sensual kisses so perfectly placed 

She drank them in like drops of sin

Seductively luring her embrace

The dance went on into the night

As she hung on his every sweet word

Failing to notice the vampire glare

Till his teeth sunk deep into her flesh

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Reviews

[Fireyphoenix]

Wow! That's beautiful! "She drank them in like drops of sin" says it all! As seen through ones eyes.

[Nigel Newman]

Hi there. This flows really nicely. Very similar start to the shorter one I just read, I think. But this stays lyrical the whole way. I can't make up my mind whether he really is/was a vampire in your imagination ... but for me I take it slightly more metaphorically, signifying things going deeper in an unexpected direction that at least shocks her, if not alarms her. Didn't 666 have some connotations? Can't recall. But for me, I'll read it as him being a lover who borders on being dangerous, where she loves the edge of risk as an aphrodisiac ... Nice job! Nigel