Our street

Our street

 

The pye-dog ran away

From what?

He belonged to nothing

Name, home, collar or fame

The pye-dog ran way

To what?

Didn’t the street belong to him?

The children, vendors and garbage can?

 

The pye-dog ran away

From pain?

To belong elsewhere

To loving folks and shelter from the rain?

 

The pye-dog ran away

Did he?

Is he missed only when lost?

Is his presence only then sought?

 

Instant joy his trot expressed

Possessive affection strongly repressed

Street guardian status his bark distinguished

Has his life the traffic extinguished?

 

Reviews

[Devons]

This is really snappy and mind-diving, i think, this poem! Really sagacious and sharp tone on the whole with some very neatly expressed lines. What i really like about it is the sense you get that this is a strong metaphor for the 'dogs' of the human race; that have similar personality traits. The repeated question, each time in variance, is very effective, and the poem has an overall reassuring/sharing quality about it; like an old man sitting by the fire and giving his thougts on life to you. It has quite a 'cool' nature to it, too, as a whole. The last verse is terrific!

[Tanya7]

i love the ythm in this poem. ovrall it had a positive beaty flow. great job

[Wicahpi]

aww poor puppy!
Hopefully he found a paradise somewhere.
Sad, but good write.

[Tina Kline]

From an emotional point this paints a sad scene of what happens to unwanted dogs that really have no where to go but the street, not really noticed by anyone yet hoping to be noticed then they end up dying. I don't know what a pye-dog is but I still feel bad for him/her. You did a great job on this.

[Michael X]

this strikes me somewhat whismical in nature at the same time it plays well in simplicity and structure , the form gave the words a certain flow that
was in equal balance with length, so over all, a great poem, i liked it

[An owl on the moon]

This is a wondrous twist on words, the questions bringing us closer to the pye-dog who had no home to call his own. We begin to care, feel the emotion of his journey.. his lostness... and then there is the sadness of his possible demise. You've written then in a brilliant form!

[Mike Espinosa]

This is a pretty cool poem. Your repetitive asking of questions, using the same first like in most of the stanza, was awesome. The change in the last stanza was a good touch, like all the previous questions were either answered or abandoned. Your word choice was interesting. My only suggestions are making "else where" into 1 word, and adding some more punctuation to distinguish from the questions and the statements. Overall, great poem.

[emmajoy]

Oh my, what a special poem, the way you've formatted it in questions is pleasantly unusual and made me want to read on to find the answers ..

I don't know what a pye-dog is .. but seems he came to a sad end.

Thank you for sharing, my friend..