Crazy town

Crazy town

A Poem by Globy

There are times... crazy times.. :)

Crazy town, crazy s**t
Boring, homeless in a kit
Taste of fun into my mouth
Traveling fast, traveling south

Looking around for a soul
Only rats into my zone
Taste of grace into my mouth
Traveling fast, traveling south

Look at me
I’m a star
Are you jealous?
Yes you are

Eat my trace
I’m so far
As I told you
I’m a star

Here’s nice but where am i?
I need a drink and eat a pie
Taste of fight into my mouth
I should have paid, running south

Running, running, running fast
Back to town back to past
Crazy town, crazy s**t
Boring, homeless in a kit


© 2012 Globy

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Posted 11 Years Ago

i love this reminds of a delusional loner living in a big city who just wants things givin to them. like they are entitled to the world. but they have to realized they have to work and earn their place. great piece

Posted 11 Years Ago

1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

It's all out there, happening. Some winning, more losing. Most not quiet achieving either.

Posted 12 Years Ago

I found this interesting although i didn't understand it. The lines flowed very rythmatically and smoothly and the story although lost on me seems to be based on interesting ideas.

Posted 12 Years Ago

Funny, very rhythmic, and simple enough to provoke happy feelings. Not bad :)

Posted 12 Years Ago

The English could use a little touch up .. but that aside, I Like .. It tells a story, of just being out there .. .. It is crazy, and a real rat race ... if you live through the day, you are lucky ...

J. :)

Posted 12 Years Ago

I love this! very nice. I want to go south too! :)

Posted 12 Years Ago

I say keep traveling's a good direction! (laughing) This comes from a southerner from North Carolina. I like to tell everyone I'm a just a hillbilly like Thomas Wolfe...(smile) This was simple and fun...and kind of crazy...which I believe was the feeling it was intended to invoke. The purpose to writing I believe is to invoke in our readers the same emotion that drove the creation of our art. If my assessment is accurate, then this served its purpose well. Pay no attention to naysayers...keep writing if its something you enjoy...there are very few who make a living writing and none who make a living writing poetry! As Robert Frost once observed, " Being a poet is a condition; NOT an occupation." Bless.

Posted 12 Years Ago

This poem sounds like you don't fully understand English, as if it's a second language to you. It seems broken and misunderstand, and quite frankly in some places a bit strange.

"Taste of fun into my mouth." That does not convey the imagery you think it does, and its connotations are a bit, shall we say, probably not what you had in mind...

I don't fully understand the purpose of the poem and it just seems like you threw a few ideas together on a whim without really thinking about it. Like I said, the English reads poorly - as if it is not your first language - and the content is narcissistic without being good enough to justify you alleviating yourself above others in a similar situation.

The main imagery I got was of a small gypsy child at a travelling circus, wandering around the big rides and stalls by herself while her mum and dad are lost in amongst the other fare goers. It made me a think a bit of Hanna - the film - but only because of the notion that this little girl is more mature than she should be, and the content was very, very strange and probably poorly construed.

I don't think it's as good as what people have reviewed it to be, and that's just ridiculous. People should tell you what your shortcomings are because to be honest you have a lot to work on in terms of getting across your idea clearly and using English properly, as opposed to using the language incorrectly without being creatively unique/effective.

"I need a drink and eat a pie" it just doesn't make sense artistically or literally. That sounds like a Russian girl saying she is hungry to some rich businessman in London.

I don't get what you've done here and it seems very, very rushed. A hurried attempt, I'd say.

Posted 12 Years Ago

1 of 2 people found this review constructive.

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12 Years Ago

It's not down to opinion whether or not you understand syntax of a language as it's pretty evident i.. read more
J. F. Charleston

12 Years Ago

My standars are none of your concern and neither is my responsiblities. I have both high standars an.. read more

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Added on July 3, 2012
Last Updated on July 4, 2012



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