demons.

if you look into my eyes,
you'll find it's where my demons hide,
they snarl and claw and will take a bite,
if you get too close to this boy, their hide.

no priest can exorcise them off,
these hellspawn will just laugh, guffaw,
so please take a step away from me,
i can't guarantee that they won't break free.

as much as i'd like you to stay,
i don't wish to hurt you, not today
the sword of Damocles hangs over my head,
someday i'll probably end up dead.

what then will happen to you?
as much as i hope your heart stays true,
i only wish you'll stay away,
perhaps we'll avoid the hand fate wants to play.

Author's Note

ehhhhhhhhh. i kinda let this one just flow out of my mind. started from a line from "Demons" by Imagine Dragons, ended up with this hahahahah

Reviews

[Tai Ryens]

You're head is in the right place, but you might need a bit of help expressing what you may formulate.
For starters, I would suggest expanding your vocabulary a bit; either that or keep it simple. You see, I could not help but notice how your style switches from highly sophisticated language (i.e. guffaw, sword of Damocles, exorcise) to becoming a line nothing more of a verb, a pronoun, and multiple connecting verbs and nouns.
To put it simply: expand vocabulary, read a bit of poetry to give yourself an edge with a pencil, and write, write, WRITE. You have much potential, all you need to do is work on expressing yourself.

[Tai Ryens]

Not to say you're horrible at it, I'm just saying there is much work for improvement.

[gnafla]

thanks for the advice! i'll work more on my vocabulary! and will definitely read more once my examinations are over.

[Tim Lion]

I like it. :)

[gnafla]

thanks! :)

[Tim Lion]

I like your unique vocabulary choices. it gives a sense of the moment. sometimes, I get so wrapped up in picking the proper individual words, and I lose my own voice in the process. you have not done that. and I find it refreshing. Cheers!