Crystal ball

Crystal ball

A Poem by Lale
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"thinking about the ocean"

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I gifted myself a seashell necklace
so that I can forever carry the ocean
on my chest


Weird day at the beach
waves so high
they almost reach the sky
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The ocean whispers to the gloomy sailor
"tides will wash your troubles away."
a warm smile appears
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Tis what I always sea
in my seashell necklace
ocean being the the best form of nature bein



© 2020 Lale


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Lale
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A lovely poem, with excellent SEA imagery, it's like wearing the sea when you wear your shell necklace; even high waves do not harm, but help to "wash one's troubles away"...a very nice brevity poem Lale.
Best, Betty

Posted 4 Months Ago


This is stunningly fresh thinking. Each verse seems to strike out in a wholly different direction, yet they're all tied in ways & the ending ties back to the beginning. This is such imaginative thinking, even tho your actual wordplay is minimal (straightforward writing): "waves so high they almost reach the sky." I can do fancy wordplay with my eyes closed, but this is the high imagination I yearn for when I write. I love how your overall message speaks to how there's always some beloved entity that we carry around on our chests, speaking to our hearts & flavoring the air with a briny smile (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 1 Year Ago


Lale

1 Year Ago

Dear Margie, it's always a delight reading your feedback. Thank you. aand welcome back.
I like that you have a seashell necklace. My Nan gave me two really large conch shells when I was a child, when I moved out of her home and moved to be with my parents. I missed her terribly, but she told me to hold the shells to my ear and listen to the tides rolling in. I can't tell you what a huge comfort that was to me. It is for that reason I am so fond of sea shells found on the beach. Your poem is visual and reminds me how the sea can change moods. Going from playful to stormy and doing so quickly. It can be tranquil or angry. I guess people can also be like that. I like the journey you took me on Lale. thank you.

Chris

Posted 1 Year Ago


Lale

1 Year Ago

Aaah! grandmothers give the most valuable gifts. Lucky you. I love how we can all relate to the ocea.. read more
I love watching the ocean turn from calm to stormy. This shows me a heavy heart, but the tides may alleviate some pain and bring some hope . There is some beauty in an an angry ocean. And you perhaps can predict with your seashell necklace. Nice Write!!

Posted 1 Year Ago


Lale

1 Year Ago

That's beautiful angle to describe the ocean, Betty. I've read somewhere that we carry the ocean ins.. read more
Betty Hermelee

1 Year Ago

My pleasure😊
I lived by the Atlantic Ocean for 15 years, and I visited again a few weeks ago. This captures what I've felt standing on the sand, especially with low storm clouds, a purple sky and white-capped waves. The imagery and emotional rush you captured with so few words makes this a great poem.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Lale

1 Year Ago

I'm grateful for this poem, for it enabled me to meet ocean lovers. Thank you so much for sharing th.. read more
R.E. Ray

1 Year Ago

You're welcome.
A calming read. The imagery helped to visualise the whole poem. The lines 'so that I can forever carry the ocean on my chest' is poetry at its finest.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Lale

1 Year Ago

thank you so much Neetha for your kind review.
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The deep ocean is one my great inspiration it's also place where begging of life was born. It's place full of mystery and beauty.

When we once at summer played we were Inuit people we weared shell neckless too with carved name my name was Sugalik. So it's reminds my one of the magical summer at my life. Second stanza it's reminds me when I were on Scottish rocky beach and get splashed by 2 metre waves at cold weather. Last stanza reminds me how we should appreciate everything what we have it. Special real friendship , family and peace at heart. One the most finest writing what I read today.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Lale

1 Year Ago

that's so heartwarming. thank you. :)
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1 Year Ago

Thank you it was wonderful get over all my memories with help of your stanzas .
nicely done, these all make up a whole...a sum of the parts....of the seashells...
I especially like the third one...the whisper, the comfort...
i feel the waves and hear their breath.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Lale

1 Year Ago

Thank you so much for your kind review. wave sound is like a lullaby.

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