Longing

Longing

A Poem by Lale
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Life is tasteless without poetry.

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I remember, early -early- morn
soft wind blowing that linen curtain
and music aesthetically plays background
I never thought about longing more than today
little sun peeping in
yet running away the moment i realize its presence
I lie, I wake up for that blink
I never thought about longing more than today
Nothing that i miss more
than the aroma of jasmine
wearing my neighbor's garden bravely
I never thought about longing more than today

© 2020 Lale


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This is a very haunting poem. You have created a deliberate effect & it works strongly to put the reader into this forlorn mindset of chronic dissatisfaction. I love that you throw in a hint that this could be about longing for a person, but other unrelated hints let this also be about all different other kinds of longings. I'm not usually a fan of font manipulation to a large degree, but the italics really work well (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 3 Months Ago


Lale

2 Months Ago

Hello Barleygirl,
thank you for your heartwarming feedback! I appreciate that.
Poetry is made for those moments. Remembering that scented jasmine. What better way than expressing it in poetic format. That soft wind blowing on the linen curtain and the music have certainly captured the moment. Beautifully visual.

Chris

Posted 3 Months Ago


Lale

2 Months Ago

Thank you so much. I'm glad it made you feel that way. I love how words can personify scents and vis.. read more
Honest and strong words shared. You allowed the reader to feel your thoughts and your emotions. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

Posted 3 Months Ago


Lale

2 Months Ago

Thank you so much, Coyote.
Coyote Poetry

1 Month Ago

You are welcome my friend.
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Those moments you speak of never leave the memory, and fortunately so. For what is poetry without words to describe those special and sometimes painful experiences.

Posted 3 Months Ago


Lale

3 Months Ago

That's true. Thank you for reading.
A rather sad, but poignant piece on something missing in your life, but perhaps timid to embrace it. Fear of sunlight, only a glimpse and return to your mood.we don’t know what one longs for....sometimes it’s love, friendship, etc
The aromas of Jasmine, ; it’s the early morn of longing.
Very nicely written Lale.
Fondly, Betty


Posted 5 Months Ago


Lale

3 Months Ago

Thank you so much for this profound interpretation.
Betty Hermelee

3 Months Ago

You’re very welcome and I did enjoy reading this poem, really touched me.
Best B
Hi Lale, lovely poem about longing for who? Maybe just longing....the blink of of early morn sun seems to give you a certain emotion And it’s not just the blink of the sun but the smell of jasmine ....perfect words to describe your mood ...Nice work! Best, Betty


Posted 9 Months Ago


Lale

3 Months Ago

Thank you for reading, dear Betty.
Betty Hermelee

3 Months Ago

I admire your perfect emotive writing, so true to our moods,
Always
Betty
Lale

3 Months Ago

you are very kind
Love the jasmine lines....how else can we really express longing except in poetic terms...
the sun can run from us, the words cannot.
j.

Posted 9 Months Ago


Lale

3 Months Ago

I couldn't agree more. Thank you.

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