Melancholy Wave

Won't you come and play

upon my melancholy wave,

It's only for the lonely,

It's only for the brave,

Won't you come and live

inside my melancholy head

It's only got one colour,

the only colour is red,

Won't you come and look

into my melancholy eyes,

if only for the questions,

if only for the lies,

Won.t you come and smile

into my melancholy mind,

if only out of pity,

to see what you won't find,

Won't you come and rip

apart my melancholy hand

it's only full of dreams,

it's only full of sand,

Won't you come and kiss me

 on my melancholy heart,

it's only in two pieces,

it's only torn apart,

Won't you come and play

upon my melancholy wave,

it's only for the lonely,

it's only just a wave,

It's only just a wave

my melancholy wave.

Reviews

[Neville]

you just gone and done a grand job here, right from the title thru to the very end.... a foot tappin beat if ever there was...

[gram linski]

cheers Neville, bass line at bottom of page, sing along now, everybody, thanks for the read,

[Neville]

gotcha... :)

[Robert Trakofler]

Hey Gram...This is written in such a great sing song voice but is in lovely contrast just a gut wrenching subject well penned and lovely lament great rhythm and rhyme and fantastic emotion expressed damn good writing here

[gram linski]

High praise indeed from a man of your talents, thanks, B. was actually a song once upon a go, for bass line see below,

[Robert Trakofler]

Ha Ha Wow that explains the sound i was hearing:)

[Ted Kniffen]

Won't you come out, Gram...I love the word melancholy...conveys so much more than sad...and waves have a power that can knock you a*s over tipple cart...as me old grandad used to say.

A brilliant write.

[gram linski]

Thanks Ted, melancholy is not only deeper than sad it's also harder to type, lol,

[Ted Kniffen]

That it is. ;>}

[Paul Bell]

That melancholy wave takes a long time to perfect.
Just when you think the sea is out, it comes straight back in.
Good times ahead for tomorrows people.

[gram linski]

Good times ahead for a bunch of seventies, peado sci fi freaks, you need help, friend, not my help obviously, someone else's, lol,

[Cherrie Palmer]

A toast to a happier tomorrow and a good friend to share today.

[gram linski]

Slange, Cherrie, there is a happier tomorrow, the wave will ebb and flow

[Chris Shaw]

What sadness is detected here. A truly melancholic write gram and written in rhyme and stanzas. Hopefully those waves of melancholy will wash away soon. This one almost got me tearful.
Chris

[gram linski]

There is an old Chinese saying; *May your house be free of tigers,*, no wait a minute, *All things will change,* that's the good thing about a wave it ebbs and flows comes and goes, cheers Chris,

[John Alexander McFadyen]

A pensive sadness writ in rhyme. A sensitive call out for thee Sir gram AND in rhyme. I stand impressed and fall to the agony of one so trapped in misery as you portray.

[gram linski]

Cheers John, it started life as a song, although you might think the one is trapped, he knows all things are fluid and it's only just a wave,

[PaintedBirdy]

good s**t. the only thing that caught my attention was the british spelling of "colour" rather than the popular american "color". i was always taught to write like a populist, haha, and to avoid being figured out where i'm from. cheers, mate, i love bits of sad poetry.

[gram linski]

Don't think American is populist anywhere, thanks to potus, cheers yerself, mate,

[PaintedBirdy]

well, i mean populist as in cultureless bland writing accessible to masses, like Taylor Swift. cheers before beers!

[gram linski]

Then that definitely is the united states of the greatest of A,

[jacob erin-cilberto]

This is exceedingly depressing...which is probably the purpose...i am swept away by the wave not sure if it is the ocean, or tears.
As i read this i was humming "Just ask the lonely" by the Four Tops.
i like the consistency in the stanzas...the repetition drives home the sadness.
j.

[gram linski]

Thanks j. the repetition is because these are song lyrics, there is a bass line, if you're interested, lol

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I can see that...love bass....
thanks for the heads up.

[gram linski]

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