Hesitation marks

Hesitation marks

A Poem by gram linski

I tried to bleed
the veins were dry

I tried to scrawl
the muses pen was
smashed upon the floor

I tried to leave
many, many times
and the tide of tears
swept me back
against the shore

I tried to love
your intolerant heart
but the barbed wire kisses
bit too deep

I tried to call, but the
smashed entrails of a smartphone
were not that smart,
after all

I tried to write, but
the scrunched up, scrawled upon
dead tree and ink
blocking the toilet
will not flush
refuses to exit
drain left

I tried to e-mail
but pornhub predictive txt
got there first

I tried to speak in
broken, drunken honesty
and tried to understand
your silent, pithy commentary

I tried to leave
many, many sleepless nights
tossed and turned
in guilt and sweat

You tried once, 
Gezuntight !

© 2019 gram linski


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Another fine title. It’s hard to get my footing while reading this because I haven’t figured out if I’m meant to laugh or cry. I could do both at the same time. Sometimes when I laugh I cry anyway, so maybe I’ll just do that. Then no one can say I reacted wrongly.

Relationships are s**t sometimes. And other people a complete mystery (and they love to be!). Trying. In the context of the poem it seems overrated. But, sometimes we try because we feel we deserve the punishment. Hmm.

I don’t know. I’m going to laugh-cry my way out of here and think about it.

I always enjoy your dance between humor and despair. When you do that on the page. That sounds awkward, but hopefully you’ll get what I mean.

Posted 4 Years Ago


gram linski

4 Years Ago

certainly do, Eilis, I was laugh/crying as I wrote it, lol, we all deserve a little bit of punishmen.. read more
Why am I laughing while reading this a second and third time just to make sure I didn't miss any of the supreme effort you made in attempting a reconciliation? She had a lucky escape my friend. :))

Chris

Posted 4 Years Ago


gram linski

4 Years Ago

Haha, cheeky f****r, thanks, Chris
Chris Shaw

4 Years Ago

What me??? Ha ha.
the try trials trail of tears taking you to tear troublesome tact to tatters...oh my this is sad and hilarious at the same time time to find a new face for your rhymes my fine friend! :) this was a very clever write

Posted 4 Years Ago


gram linski

4 Years Ago

and you are a cunning linguist, dude, do you speak like this out loud lol, the bunny banter ballast .. read more
Robert Trakofler

4 Years Ago

Lol I do sometimes after I have been writing too long I cant stop rhyming and or alliterating
gram linski

4 Years Ago

and why should you
could you
would you
dude.you.
The writer's loneliness.
"I tried to speak in
broken, drunken honesty
and tried to understand
your silent, pithy commentary"
I loved the above lines and us, who love to write. Must find the place where the pen comes alive. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry and your thoughts.
Coyote

Posted 4 Years Ago


gram linski

4 Years Ago

Thanks again, for me the pen comes alive in the spare room, music blasting, alone with a quill, and .. read more
Coyote Poetry

4 Years Ago

I do understand the need for a quiet room and you are welcome.
A one sided attempt to reconcile differences through discussion/communication met with silence and a frail attempt by the other party. There is a sort of desperation in the protagonists multiple tries at getting through and as is often the case it is too late as the horse has already bolted!

Posted 4 Years Ago


gram linski

4 Years Ago

Pretty much, dude, pretty much, cheers,
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DAH
First up, the closing couplet is fabulous, funny and tight.

Every stanza is firm in its stance of emotions and truth.

Love this one:
"I tried to e-mail
but pornhub predictive txt
got there first"

There's a radical passion in this write, akin to
a powerful love song, far from the dull clutches of modern pop.

I'd love to hear this recited with a bit of abstract jazz, lightly,
in the back ground.

"I tried to call, but the
smashed entrails of a smartphone
were not that smart,
after all" excellent!

Bravo!





Posted 4 Years Ago


gram linski

4 Years Ago

Thanks for reviewing DAH, glad you liked it, if you want to recite my poem to abstract jazz, recite .. read more
DAH

4 Years Ago

My pleasure!

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