DETERMINE...

DETERMINE...

A Poem by Alexandra G.

Determine if it's good,
If you are able to give everything.
If you have proof,
If you know your way.
Determine if it's good,
If you know the truth.
If you know you can,
If you know good and evil.

Determine if it's good,
If it brings you happiness.
If you are looking for stability,
If you know who you are.
Determine if it's good,
If you know the right moment.
If you know when you will cry,
If you know how much you can give.
 
Determine if it's good,
If you know you are happy.
If you know your future,
If you can continue little by little.
Determine if it's good,
If you are persistent.
If you know yourself deeply,
If you love yourself enough.

Determine if it's good,
If there is spirit and passion.
If you recognize yourself,
If you know how to love as you say.
Determine if it's good,
If you know who you are.
If you know where you're going,
And if you know how not to give up.

© 2019 Alexandra G.


Author's Note

Alexandra G.
Just words... ignore grammar dialogue or problems..

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Amazing!!! I really love the way the words speak positively to me.. I love the reoccurring line, " Determine if it's good." That line speaks volumes to me and how we can pertain that to our everyday lives.. I love the different scenarios that you give the reader.. Lovely work...

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Alexandra G.

1 Year Ago

April! Thank you for your lovely review, means a lot! And yes, you're right. Glad you loved it... bl.. read more



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I'm not a big fan of repetition, so I do not feel that your repeating line is very effective. It's too bland of a statement to be your central repeating refrain. "Good" does not conjure up anything specific. It's too general to spark a feeling or some ideas in the reader's mind. I love your message & I understand what you're trying to say. But you use quite a few general terms that could be pumped up, if you used more dynamic verbs & imagery to appeal to the senses. SHOW ME what "good" is . . . how can the reader know if you don't paint word pictures of how it feels & how it smells & how it sounds. Are we talking about good music? Good food? When you get into the specifics of a message, it starts to POP more. Your writing is strong & your message is intelligent, but I just want to see you pump this up with imagination & imagery & movement & details! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Alexandra G.

1 Year Ago

Thank you so much for your tips! Blessings and hugs as well...
The poetry question many things. I believe we set our journey. We must decide right or wrong. I liked the energy and the drive in your words dear Alexandra. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Alexandra G.

1 Year Ago

Thanks so much for your review, means a lot! Many blessings for you...
Coyote Poetry

1 Year Ago

You are welcome dear Alexandra.
it's good....love...self-love which is necessary...and loving others which creates beauty in the world around us.
we have to be happy with ourselves before we can be happy with others.

nicely done...and your grammar is just fine....
j.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Alexandra G.

1 Year Ago

Indeed Jacob! quite mesmerizing. Thanks so much for your review... Blessings!
There are so many questioning thoughts in your poem: ideas, mentions, cues and nudges that perhaps one doesn't always consider and must, should. It's so easy to overlook one's own flaws whilst noticing or/and criticising others'. This writing should be kept as a means of how to be - how to become if one only pauses to consider. Thank you so much, Alexandra.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Alexandra G.

1 Year Ago

Emma, thank you so much for your lovely review, means a-lot!
Amazing!!! I really love the way the words speak positively to me.. I love the reoccurring line, " Determine if it's good." That line speaks volumes to me and how we can pertain that to our everyday lives.. I love the different scenarios that you give the reader.. Lovely work...

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Alexandra G.

1 Year Ago

April! Thank you for your lovely review, means a lot! And yes, you're right. Glad you loved it... bl.. read more

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Alexandra G.
Alexandra G.

San Juan, Puerto Rico



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