no more

no more

A Poem by kelly

If he doesn't want to look

don't open his eyes

his loss if he can't see

whats really inside

 

this is olnly a game

you have a higher score

and you've come all this way

please don't cry anymore

 

you fight your battles strong

when you know what you fight for

and it's been too long

please don't cry anymore

 

do you know who you are

we all think that we do

its why we stand here shouting

and cheering for you

 

when you run at full pace

he stops and turns around

but the finish line's strait ahead

don't let him slow you down

 

cause this is only a game

and you have a higher score

and you've come all this way

please don't cry anymore

 

and you fight your battles strong

when you know what you fight for

and it's been too long

so please don't cry anymore

no more

 no more

  no more

© 2011 kelly


Author's Note

kelly
i wrote this in under 3 minutes with no editing so if you have something to correct i promise you i'll figure it out some time

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Don't you ever dare tell me that you aren't a good poet. This was magnificent and gave me shivers down my spine. The first two lines were outstanding; immediately gripped my attention and interest. Absolutely brilliant work with a bittersweet tang of hope and consideration... The errors of capitalization and punctuation, I felt, actually added to the rawness of the piece. I would expect no less. Something as wonderful as this would've taken me at least an hour to complete. The fact that you wrote a masterpiece such as this boggles my mind... I applaud you...

_Cloud

Posted 12 Years Ago


This made me think of something right after I just read the first stanza...
Anyways, I loved this poem, Kelly. It was beautiful and very emotional. Sure there were some spelling errors, but, hey, you wrote it in under 3 minutes and it still turned out great. Awesome job!

Posted 12 Years Ago



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