A Autumn Day

 

 

             This love is like Autumn wind blowing in the breeze

             So soft and gentle like the kiss we once shared

The changing leafs blowing gently in the wind

As we walk down the path

Kissing you is like being in a timeless love that will never end

So loving you reminders me of that great Autumn day                      we shared, ever changing but returning just the same.

Author's Note

first try so be nice

Reviews

[TantusAmorScribendi]

I like the imagery, I feel like I can walk on that autumn day myself and almost as if I am witness to this great love. You have an interesting contrast between change and timeless events going on, and that is intriguing. I have a hard time following how autumn, which is ever changing, lends itself to a timeless love, because autumn is the direct opposite of timeless. Perhaps you are trying to construe how love can be seasonal with its ups and downs? Like I said, I'm having just a little bit of a hard time following, but I still like your poem!! Oh, and as for spelling: leaves, not leafs, and reminds, not reminders.

[Anna Veronica]

I like the atmosphere of this poem very much!

[Chaos]

I thought this was absolutely beautiful. I could feel the crisp air touch the couples faces as their lips touched with the heat of passion, but surrendering that heat for the coolness of Autumn. I felt love and the season and it was written so softly and beautiful. This by far is your best.

[Fear Corrupts!]

I like the format...good concept...i liked the poem in general. Well done.