let your heart call out

let your heart call out

A Poem by The Shadow of the Dawn
"

i will stand by you as a guardian

"

When trouble is all you know,

Let your heart call out,

I’ll be right beside you,

 

When you stand at the edge ready to jump,

Let your heart call my name,

I’ll catch you and fly you to the ground,

 

When sadness takes over,

and tears fall from your heart,

I’ll hold you tight in a feathered embrace,

 

When your dreams are full of shadows,

And your heart screams in fear,

I will lay beside you till the morning sun rises,

 

When you feel that you don’t belong in this world,

I’ll come before your heart calls,

Show you the love that I feel,

Give you a reason to live,

 

When the time comes for the light to leave your eyes,

and your heart can no longer call to me,

I'll take you into my arms and fly you to gates of heaven,

for to be without you is a fate worse then death.

© 2012 The Shadow of the Dawn


Author's Note

The Shadow of the Dawn
please re read pleasssse:P

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Second to last stanza, first line "fell" --> "feel".
Your info bar "I well stand by you as a guardian" --> "I will stand by you as a guardian".

It's very sweet, and it makes me wish that I could find a love like this. I love your repetition of "When". You portrayed true love very well - always there for somebody, there when you need them, there before you need them, always there, even when someone is gone. I also like the idea that your "heart" can call out - love is something that doesn't have to be vocal.


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This is truly amazing. I'm generally stunned by this piece.

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Wow well you certainly "let your heart call out" this poem is very nice, the lines and words you use through out. Enjoyed, very nice.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I think that is the most beautiful poem I ever read so compassionate and loving.

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beautiful write! love like this is rare and some people will only experience it vicariously through those who are kind enough to share and gifted enough to turn feelings into words.....like you have done with this piece.

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well done... a touching declaration..

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very lovely and great emotions

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Isn't it beautiful how the power of love can take so many forms? You built a sweet picture of how you would always be there to save your lover, and your use of romantic lines made it even more deep.
A tiny typo, the last line, it is 'than', not 'then'.
An enjoyable piece. Well done.

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Wow this is the 3rd time I've read this and I just really love it so much I just have to read it again and agian

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Wow!

This reminds me of a true and perfect, lasting love. It's amazing how this is so short and to the point.

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to be a savior, this poem is lulling and captures the moment of desire of a grace.
sweet and soft, very nice job :)

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