If an Angel appears

If an Angel appears before you,

Holds out his hand and says “come join me, I’ll show you where the heavens meet the earth”

Would you take it, and let him fly you away

 

If you take his hand, he’ll fly you over the mountains, over the rivers, over the seas

He’ll show you the beauty he sees in the world, he’ll show you...

 

If an Angel appears beside you,

Puts a hand on your shoulder and wipes away your tears

Would you slap his hand away and say don’t

 

If you let him, he’ll make you smile with each passing day,

He’ll show you there is good in the world, he’ll show you...

 

If an Angel appears behind you,

Wraps his arms around you and with a single beat of his great wings blows your troubles away

Would you pull away, and say no

 

If you let him, he’ll fight for you with all his heart, he’ll fight for you till he can’t fight anymore

He’ll give anything to hold even if the cost is his grace, he’ll give anything...

 

Everyone waits for their Angel but no one looks for the Angels that have already given their wings and watch over you from the shadows,

Everyone waits for their angel but no one looks for the Angels that have already stood by you and fight for you every day,

Author's Note

this doesn't sound right to can anyone help

Reviews

[InterijentoWrites]

Puts a hand on your shoulder and wipes away you** tears-- should be your

If you let him, he’ll fight for you with all his heart, he’ll fight for you tell** he can’t fight anymore-- Should be until.

This is a very nice piece. Some formatting needs to be done so it isnt such an eye-sore, and looked appealing to the eye. But other than the two mistakes I mentioned, I didnt find anything else. This is a well worded piece, and very true, honest. Everyone is looking for whats ahead, not what is right infront of them. Keep up the good work.

[Irvette Dauphine]

this is amazing poem..
i like it.. :D

really, sometimes i feel it too
there somebody that help me, but i just say no
maybe that is my angel :)

[Aly Jones]

Amazing. This brought me to tears with its beauty.

[Reaper]

very beautiful

[Rowan Storm]

Angels..... hmmmm. Thinky.

[Sashalee]

wow...just wow. I almost cry reading this. this is an extremely amazing poem :)

[StillShorterThanYou]

that was really cute, and an your angel in disguise could be your best friend.. or enemy, you never know :D

[Umbra-Regina]

The visuals in this piece made the message and feeling behind it very evident. When you used phrases such as "Would you slap his hand away and say don’t", it made me really think about the meaning behind it and made me think of the phrase which came before it (If an Angel appears beside you, Puts a hand on your shoulder and wipes away your tears) and think "Well that sounds kind of nice, actually." Phrases like that really made the connection to the reader real. The only problem I had was that some lines were were too long. I would prefer them to be separated, but that may just be me personally. Other than that, I really enjoyed this poem.

[Jake Staffeld]

"come join me..." should be "Come join me..."

I liked it, until the final two lines. They just didn't fit with the poem as a whole. They were too long, too unwieldy to fit. You could try breaking them up, the might fit the rhythm better then. This happens a few times, actually. It seems like there are some extra words in this poem. You might want to take that with a grain of salt, though, since most all of my writing involves short lines.

As far as the themes go, I liked it. It was strong on what it was saying. It just wasn't as eloquent as it could have been.

[C.A.Jordon]

good job

[Crystal Marie Dreier]

This is good the way it is in my opinion. It made sence to me and I hope to read more of your work!!