Obituary

Obituary

A Poem by the_stoic
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Night has fallen , darkness abounds
Somewhere in the wilderness , a lost soul hounds .

Was it his grief that was profound
Or his adversaries that had brought him face down on the ground .

I know not but am bound to trudge along and see
Cause the dreadful whining wont let me breathe free .

As I draw close , shiver runs down my spine
I reproach myself for wandering off , yet keep on saying "everything is fine" .

At some distance i chance upon a mound
A few steps more and an epitaph is what i found .

I bend down for the thick layers of dust needs to be blown away
The wind seems to be assisting me , as the trees begin to sway .

Light from the crescent moon falls on the engravings
I slowly start to read , giving way to my inner cravings .

"As i lay herein , I am glad i can no longer be seen
They will never come to know of the remorse that lies within
Thou aren't aware of the bouts of miseries that had grown
Cause a cheerful countenance is what i had always shown
My dreams kept getting out of sight
Yet i garnered hope to plunge in for a last fight
I succumbed cause against destiny i had no might
In the end , had to accept my woeful plight ."

Dumbstruck i frantically start to search for the day
When the poor man had to finally go away .

I find none
The day that signified that Satan had finally won !

Amidst the turmoil of emotions , a thought suddenly dawned
There lay no man and so no mention of the day was to be found .

It was my own soul that was making the call
The one that had bore all and taken the fall .

All that remained of me is this mortal body
A futile mind that makes me do menial work that's quite shoddy .

I pluck a black rose and lay it on the solitary grave
For my soul that never was , as they termed it 'rave' ...

© 2010 the_stoic


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this poem is mysterious until the end. It captures that feeling of not being worthy and wanting more out of life. I can relate to this feeling at times but I have learned along the way it is the little things in life that mean the most and that no matter what the world around you says be the best person you can be not the best person that others want you to be. This poem is dark and captures those feelings of being inadequate

Posted 13 Years Ago


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Wonderful imagery (I always go for the imagery in poems I read).. It's good to see another Dark poet, they're pretty rare these days. The rhymes, wordings, everything perfect. What more can I say? (:

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Wow….
Wonderful….
Stoic…..
You are really talented…….


Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

As a Poe lover I must say it has a hint of him but not alot. I actually don't like this piece but it is very well written.

Posted 13 Years Ago


Very nice write. It does remind me of Poe like the review below me says. I think it's sad though. I can see the events happening in my head as well. Thanks for sharing. :)

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Wow. I did not see that coming! Reminds me a bit in tone of Poe... I liked this very much. This is what great writing does... it paints a picture, and then turns it on its head. Wonderful.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

this was very much my kind of poem i do love this great write i am very glad to have read it

Posted 13 Years Ago


I find this poem interesting, how you put the quote/saying in the middle like that really gave it more of a eye cater. The poem was very unique in itself. Good job.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I love it. So dark and sooo powerful. Amazing write :)

Posted 13 Years Ago


Wow ! Totally awesome !

Posted 13 Years Ago


This was practically amazing!!!!!

Posted 13 Years Ago



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