Life akin to HELL

Life akin to HELL

A Poem by the_stoic
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what's this life with no desires , no hopes ?

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 The horrific thoughts of losing you in which i dwell
Makes my life no better than a living hell …

The path of love isn’t easy with thorns strewn all along
If only you had let me walk on, you wouldn’t have done anything wrong …

Why is it that God inflicts pain on me from time to time?
It seems I am being rewarded for committing a heinous crime …

The man who doth good has good done to him is what they say
If this holds true then why am I in such utter dismay !!

The woeful cries and the bitter sighs, no one will ever know
Cause a cheerful countenance is what I’ll always show …

© 2010 the_stoic


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You really do have a beautiful way with poetry. This poem.. I especially loved the last two lines, in pain yet always wearing a cheerful front. You seemed to completely shift your train of thought after the second stanza, which was a little bit confusing. I personally think you could expound more upon this, especially the story you were unraveling at the beginning. Otherwise, fantastic write, I loved it:)

Posted 10 Years Ago


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This is a great poem, incredible flow to it. It has great emotion. You have great talent.

Posted 9 Years Ago


Yes that is the law of life….
Resilience is indispensable……
Without which….life will be a hell……



Posted 10 Years Ago


I liked this poem - the second stanza was odd - as if you got derailed for a moment. All in all, it was good.

Posted 10 Years Ago


You really do have a beautiful way with poetry. This poem.. I especially loved the last two lines, in pain yet always wearing a cheerful front. You seemed to completely shift your train of thought after the second stanza, which was a little bit confusing. I personally think you could expound more upon this, especially the story you were unraveling at the beginning. Otherwise, fantastic write, I loved it:)

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Another beautiful poem from you. loved it. Do keep writing

Posted 10 Years Ago


It is hard, putting on a brave face, but if we don't, we get stomped on. From my own experience it is better to smile in the face of adversity, no matter how low we go. being stoic, is pretty much what it is all about.

Smiling at you

Tai

Posted 10 Years Ago


I Love Love Love this the way it rhymes and intertwines with each word I truly loved reading this this is a good write ^^ keep up the good work this is ever so wonderful

Posted 10 Years Ago


You are a very impressive poet. This is yet another amazing piece. The ryhme scheme works amazingly. You are a very good poet and you have to continue

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Added on May 29, 2010
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Tags: hell, heart break, lost, death

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