Down the aisle ..

Down the aisle ..

A Poem by the_stoic
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though only in my dreams ...

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               the eyelids flutter as they slowly give way
               to the dreams still clenched , evermore meant to stay.

              unfurling her silks she reaches out to me
               cute eyelids darkened with kohl, i can vividly see.

              holding hands, towards the aisle we promenade
               time stops, for this moment in a pearl brocade...

© 2010 the_stoic


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the_stoic
this is something that i just felt and wrote after reading Selene's write ...

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This is beautiful. I've had the opportunity to observe how much planning, time and effort goes into weddings. Despite all that, the greatest moments are the small, quiet, loving ones. The moments that no amount of planning can supply. You captured some of these in the expression and execution of this poem. Very well done:)

Posted 10 Years Ago


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You bring back my most beautiful day still holding true 41 years later !

I echo the Featured Review by Albatross.........what more can I say ?!!

Posted 10 Years Ago


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delightful

Posted 10 Years Ago


This was a cute poem. I love going to weddings. I love them so much. I know I'm going to cry when I get married. Thanks for sharing. :D

Posted 10 Years Ago


so sweet! loved it

Posted 10 Years Ago


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Such a soft, silky poem, full of tender sweet love; and the phrase, '.. for this moment in a pearl brocade...' is lovely.


Posted 10 Years Ago


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this is a very nice one and well written too. Nice word choices, too, although I wouldn't use the word cute. but that is all I would change. Good simple write.

Posted 10 Years Ago


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Always a beautiful sight that; Groom and bride, hand-in-hand. A small compliment for all of them here. Nicely done :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


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This creates such a dreamish, tender feel. Beautiful voiced with that sense of expectation, you give us a longing look at love. Wondrous!

Posted 10 Years Ago


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This is beautiful!
Nice written!

Posted 10 Years Ago


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Nice...I can recognize her expressions in there...

Posted 10 Years Ago


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