Salvation

Salvation

A Poem by the_stoic
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random thoughts that flowed by as i was getting drenched in the rain ..

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The rain droplets fervently splatter on my head
letting me know that nature holds me in good stead.

Titillating my skin as they trickle down
relieving me from all that often makes me frown.

I watch the roses spread out their petals in haste
as with streaks of crystals they begin to get laced.

Birds cuddle together while getting drenched
reminding me of my desire that's still unquenched.

With so much of love and life blossoming all around
the mantra for supreme bliss is now truly found...

© 2010 the_stoic


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I loved this.. the length is apt.Your vocabulary is amazing.I like the last line which says the mantra for bliss has been found.Indeed when there is so much of love that is imbued in nature itself why do we only wallow ourselves in regrets and self pity of a love lost.

Posted 9 Years Ago


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The structure of this piece is very well balanced and maintained. Liked the notion behind it as well. Lovely!

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

have read a lot about rains,but this one blends the essence of life with the beauty of the fresh droplets...just rains as I imagine it...beautiful!

Posted 7 Years Ago


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wow..i like the images that come to mind when you go through this one..and again the picture is great..good one :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I LOVE walking in the rain....you could have written this for me !!

You are truly gifted...you clothe your thoughts in the most poignant words to touch the mind, heart and soul of the reader !!

It is bliss to visit your poetry :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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there is something magical about the rain...it is such a life giver..we hide under umbrellas and hoods but if you open yourself up, there is something refreshing about it...lovely poem

Posted 9 Years Ago


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I loved this as well. My favorite was the last stanza. The whole poem was excellent and really makes you think. I really liked this. Thanks for sharing. :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


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I really enjoyed this I love the message here as well. Wonderful flow and rhyme scheme

Posted 9 Years Ago


There is something so rich about standing in the rain.. cleansing and refreshing.. Here you've shared the pure beauty found in those moments so we can all feel that bliss. Wondrous to behold. I so hope all is well in your world my friend.

Posted 9 Years Ago


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I liked this poem very much...it is more upbeat than many of your other ones...Rain seems so cleansing and makes us feel lulled into a quiet, introspective state...
it fills a need in all of us

Posted 9 Years Ago


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The poem was smoothly creating and weaving its magic until the last couplet. I somehow feel that the last couplet didn't convey as much as feeling of goodness as the other couplets did. Maybe it's simply because of the word "Mantra". Feels weird, isn't it? Try switching the word for something else. :) Keep writing.

Posted 9 Years Ago



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