At You..

another feather adding to the poem "The word You" ..

I had begun

To live ... To live...

With you in me...

I had begun

To learn... To learn...

With you in me...

I had begun

To find peace... Peace...

With you in me...

I had begun

To learn how to smile...

With you in me...

I had begun

To understand myself...

With you in me...

And then you departed..

With everything..

Life has no meaning...

The smile has no reason...

There's no talking to you...

There's no peace inside..

There's no place to hide...

You walk past me...

You ignore my gesture...

I've lost my reason...

My tears too have abandoned ...

I try to stabilize...

I try to seek solitude..

I try ... I try ...

It's only a matter of time..

For you .. But for me..

When I see you...

Everything seems to stop...

My smile... My thoughts...

My mind... My heart ...

I just stop ...

Stop at you...

At you ...

Author's Note

tried adding something more, with little stanzas ..

Reviews

[Becca Bishop]

You know, almost every other review has called this poem "lyrical" and I'm determined to break the mold and - oh, what the heck! LYRICAL LYRICAL LYRICAL!!!
This is great!! I'm daily amazed by the insanely talented writers on this site (you're definitely one, by the way). This is beautiful and heartbreaking all at once! I love it!

[Hamza]

:) thank you
at least for a change we have a new word for this piece ...
thank you again for understanding the depth within this .. :)

[kublakhan27]

I like how this one flows...it has a lyrical feel, and I like the occasional repetition and overlapping of lines...great^^

[Hamza]

Oh thank you so much :)

[kublakhan27]

You're very welcome :)

[Jo March]

it's lovely as it is, doesn't need any more. try putting fewer ellipsis. It'll make it flow a bit more i think..

[Hamza]

thank you very much ..
and about the dots .. i call them the dots of life ...
:)