Fire in the Night

Fire in the Night

She stands, gazes at the stars above,

She thinks, wonders, watches the horizon bloom in cerise,

Why has love abandoned her?

Glittering frost in the winter night, a snow white dove,

Who would dare to disturb the peace?

The sound of a thousand footsteps disrupts the beautiful silence,

She turns her head, fear leaps into her heart,

Fire dances in her eyes of gold,

A flame so bright that the stars fade.

She runs, her nimble feet taking her far,

Wind brushes her arms,

The clouds are blowing gusts of ice at her.

She can hear them behind her, they are faster than she,

What did she do to deserve this fate?

Oh, beautiful sky, your stars deceive,

They shine so brightly on this wicked eve,

She turns around, sees her home rise up in flames,

She stumbles, and falls,

All is lost, all is over.

A hand grips hers,

Perhaps the stars aren't as deceitful as she thought.

Reviews

[annabellee]

Wow this is great. It could be a very good story.
You really had me hooked on this one.
well done :)

[Hanna Lily]

Thanks so much :) glad you liked it. Maybe I'll write it as a story one day... ^^

[annabellee]

you definitley should...
you're most welcome :)

[Angel Bird]

You grip the readers attention and have him/her curious about the story behind this. The flow is good. You leave the reader wanting for more. Great job.

[Hanna Lily]

Thank you :D

[Arrinae]

Very interesting. It raises many questions, why is she being hunted? Who is hunting her? Why does she think love has abandoned her? All of which can only be answered by imagination, but it is still a great tale of escape, though quite incomplete. We do not know if she and her love escaped the persuers and survived, if they both fell, or if one sacrificed themselves so the other could get away to live another day. Well done.

[Hanna Lily]

Thank you for the review. I'm glad you found it interesting. I wrote two continuations to this if you want to know what happens.