MESSAGE IN AN EMPTY BOTTLE

MESSAGE IN AN EMPTY BOTTLE

A Poem by hanir

"MESSAGE IN AN EMPTY BOTTLE"
She's been floating in the sea of mystery.
Trying to find answers to the most enigmatic questions.
Finding meaning to some meaningless situations.
And trying to seek for an affirmative message..
When apparently, there is none.

© 2015 hanir


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a brief message that speaks volumes...Thank you for sharing!

Posted 3 Years Ago


beautifully written!
one of my favs!
thanks for sharing...
~Amy :)

Posted 3 Years Ago


Very nicely done in so few words. Lost in a sea of questions, with few answers. Thank you for sharing.

Posted 4 Years Ago


Wonderfully written. In some cultures, a woman refers to a bottle, being fragile and transparent.

Thank you for sharing this fine piece of work.

Insight.

Posted 4 Years Ago


Brilliance needs only a few lines to impress upon its reader. I think this is awesome!

Posted 4 Years Ago


wow!that was really short and i love the way you analysed it.

Posted 4 Years Ago


This is amazing I love how you envoke such
big ideas into so few words you are truly talented

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

hanir

4 Years Ago

Thank you for giving such a nice review.
😊
butterfly desire

4 Years Ago

Your welcome .
i looooooooooooooooooooooooooooooove this!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Posted 4 Years Ago


hanir

4 Years Ago

Thank you. 😊
This poem is universal in that it will resonate with anyone at an existential crossroad. A very deep message within simple prose. My only advice would be to lose the comma in the last line as it throws off the rhythm, that or place the text after said comma in its own sentence which would accomplish the same effect as the comma but without disrupting the rhythm of the piece.

Posted 4 Years Ago


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hanir

4 Years Ago

Point noted. Thank you for taking time to read and give a constructive review on my write. I would b.. read more
I like that! No message is a message of sorts. What a cool poem.

Posted 4 Years Ago


hanir

4 Years Ago

Thank you. 😊

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