Layers

Belief unshakeable once,
Is melting now, rowing down and down,
Making me hollow,
Opening the layers of realness,
Shading out the crust,
Showing the vertical and horizontal coloumns,
Years, I took it love, I laugh,
It is nothing more than laziness of skin,
A thought tired than tiredness itself,
You, my mighty god, are not the sea,
Where I want to merge the river of my soul,
You are stagnant like a dry pond,
Sucking me more and more, to fill thyself
You do not want to loose me, I too not,
You, as you want to gain me,
My cause is to polish myself,
Making a habit of each other,
I only want to open one layer to know,
Are we contradictory or we complimentary.

Reviews

[Adam Adams]

Not a bad shot. Kinda intriguing to be read. Your poetry sounds like talking of the analogies of life which I find quite realistic to read in words. However, it reminds me: "Time moves on so does life." Very generous poetry. With time, we all get old but what's left behind is nothing but the emptiness - the contradictory of life undisguised with the implications of complimentary. Nice flow of ink. Liked the way you convey your thoughts in words.

[hardeep sabharwal]

Thanks a lot :)

[Miyana Sparks]

"I only want to open one layer to know,
Are we contradictory or we complimentary."
Oh my gosh, this line hit me so hard and it is so deep, that I had to just pause for a while to ponder over it. A very well written piece, and I am so glad that I happened to stumble upon it. Great job, and keep writing more! :)

[hardeep sabharwal]

Thank you so much :)

[Sami Khalil]

The layers of uncertainty and contradictions in life. Excellent, sir...:)..................................

[hardeep sabharwal]

Thank you so much

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:).......

[Prabha Salimath]

Good poem, I wish you to read my chapter The Soul from book GOD. You advocate a confusion regarding the concept but I tried to clear it.

[hardeep sabharwal]

Thanks a lot, and definitely I will read this chapter soon

[Prabha Salimath]

You are welcome.

[Matching Socks]

Good poem hardeep, every couple asks this question eventually.
Are we good together? Is it worth staying?

[hardeep sabharwal]

Thank you Ana

[Avinash]

When it is difficult to keep the faith you are floating on difficult waters. That will teach us more lessons than anything else.

[hardeep sabharwal]

Thankyou so much Avinash

[Skai Rain]

I love this poem! It is so damn honest and really makes us question. Thank you for sharing!

[hardeep sabharwal]

Thanks a lot friend :)

[R Smith]

finding our true selves is a life's work, well written Hardeep :)

[hardeep sabharwal]

Thankyou so much Richard :)

[Pushkar Prabhat]

life is like layer upon layer and then suddenly, life comes undone!
loved it!!!
:)

[hardeep sabharwal]

Thankyou so much :)

[M.A.Rathore]

This is so nice a subject to write on. We all need to know why are we living under the circumstances of layers. From the very first day we are told to follow the traditional ways applying all those olden practices. We are never make ready to think over the matter why we are so fastened with old values without unlayering ourselves.
As your poem voices this plea strongly. I would like to suggest you if you could divide your poems in self-contened stanzas it would so nice to read and to get the poetic beauty.
Thanks for sharing so nice poetry for reading!

[hardeep sabharwal]

Thankyou so much Rathore g