Different points of view

Different points of view

A Poem by Marie Anzalone
"

written for Tovli's Ten contest

"

You

sat there

and

upon

rolling waves

you did

drive

ideas

far away

for them to die.

 

I sensed though,

wheeling

in

distance,

forgotten

child dream

clouds

clutched

to

earth.

 

 

© 2010 Marie Anzalone


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This has an almost zen haiku feel to it. Like both the imagary of the ideas going to die and the clouds clutching the earth.

On that note, I would've liked to seen the last part of the first stanza be more concise to kinda parallel match the last, in other words, take out "for them".

Small detail, and I can see that u left it in perhaps to clairify, but damn it, this is a poem, the more obscure the better! lol

Nice work



Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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As pax might say nice Tao

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This has an almost zen haiku feel to it. Like both the imagary of the ideas going to die and the clouds clutching the earth.

On that note, I would've liked to seen the last part of the first stanza be more concise to kinda parallel match the last, in other words, take out "for them".

Small detail, and I can see that u left it in perhaps to clairify, but damn it, this is a poem, the more obscure the better! lol

Nice work



Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

very interesting form, i love the minimal usage of words---they pack such a powerful punch all on their own!!
great job!

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I find that in unequal relationships
too many compromises and adaptations
can occur.
We lose ourselves and dreams/wants
just to keep it together,
just to keep it together.

Great form and message,
Hugs, Jack

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Very pretty, Marie. I like the sense of hope in knowing that, despite it all, the dream is still solid.

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

very beautiful!

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is a nice fit for the form. The images that close this piece are very telling and strong. I like the feeling of movement that your lines convey. You show the ability to take your deep meaning and condense them into a limiting form.

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Impressive poem. I caught that child dream. Good, small image, but good and maybe says more about you than a whole book.

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

The learned Mr. Hart has, not unsurprisingly, hit the nail squarely upon the head; there is no ornate gilding on the words, no literary bric-a-brac, but the piece is as big as the waves, as wide as the sky. Utterly affecting little piece of writing.

Posted 14 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Oh My.. beautiful..

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Marie Anzalone
Marie Anzalone

Xecaracoj, Quetzaltenango, Guatemala



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Bilingual (English and Spanish) poet, essayist, novelist, grant writer, editor, and technical writer working in Central America. "A poet's work is to name the unnameable, to point at frauds, to ta.. more..

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