Untitled - Literally

Chris, you are quite talented with your writing.

I have my doubts.

 As I don't see it possible,

nor remotely probable.

Its not like I have any ambition,

nor motivation.

 I just get bored and rhyme,

usually to pass the time.

Only words upon paper,

something to look back on later.

So whether people like it or not,

it hardly matters as my talent will soon rot.

Trust me, you have talent.

You are rhyming as we speak you pain.

Its second nature to you,

you do have talent.

So you claim,

with every word you say.

But my world is black and white,

we have no gray.

Either it is good or it is bad,

either I am happy or I am sad.

To sum it up and finish it too.

Nothing anyone will say can change what I think and do.

  I simply see the day as night

 and therefore live without the light.

I only hear the words I speak,

 even though my voice is frail and weak.

 I don't pay attention to the world around me,

 I simply move unable to see.

 The world as dark and cold,

  to survive you must be bold.

I have fought all my life,

 I've been through many forms of strife.

 I have lost the point in this...

 Just another rant that is hit or miss.

Life may be cruel and unkind.

But you have to understand,

Every cloud has a silver-lining.

You need to be more bright,

Avoid the darkness within your sight.

Open your eyes to those around you.

Listen to the words they speak.

I'm sure you'll find good in this word yet.

Your mind is set,

 on that I can bet.

 But please understand,

I cannot accept a helping hand.

 I am an observer,

 he who watches from afar.

 I tend to intervene,

but I never change the outcome of the grand scheme.

 Some people are meant to lead,

 others are meant to follow.

 I know not where I belong,

I refuse to listen to advice and the orders,

 so I do not follow.

 However, I have a mind of dark intent,

 one that is overly hellbent.

 I cannot accept a place of power,

as I'll go mad within the hour.

To be honest, I once held the light,

that banished my creeping night.

Nothing like I had ever seen before,

 nothing that I can see anymore.

He who closes his eyes to the world hears everything.

 He who sees all hears nothing.

 I am your opposite.

 It seems like this much is true.

 So can you accept it as the truth?

You are quite a difficult person

and my opposite it seems you are.

I suppose this verbal duel has met an end.

I congratulate you on another victory.

As for the "truth" I won't accept it,

for we both can be difficult!

Author's Note

This is just a back and forth I had with someone. Its hardly reviewable but try if you want. :]

Reviews

[Tasha]

Wow, it was interesting but I enjoyed it.
♥ Ta'Shandra

[TheMizFit]

Interesting. Your poems are really amusing.

[Allie :)]

Wow!
I LOVE LOVE LOVE the format! It's so clean cut!
I also like how the left side is so painfully, blatantly short, and the more-or-less negative side is so much longer.
Just goes to show how little we like to look into peoples' compliments.
(btw, you're an amazing poet, just to add to the left side a little ;)

[I Am Svetlana]

Interesting conversation, but it works very well. We all have our own opinons of ourselves and others have their opinons of us as well. Many may tell us we have talent, when we really doubt that all the time and don't believe in ourselves. But as long as we are doing what keeps us sane or what makes us in tune with ourselves, we are fine. No matter what anyone thinks. We think what we want. No one can tell us who we are or who we are to be in the future. That is all up to us. Up to us and the choices we decide to make.

[Hayley]

Interesting and strong.

[DeadToTheWorld]

This was Awesome! I like the way it went back and fourth it makes the reader really pay attention...I loved it...

[BlueberryKisses]

This is amazing, I love the structure and the whole idea of this poem is just brilliant, great job! :)

[FaithfullyJennyBear]

This is confusingly quite awesome :D :P the structure is immense too.. there I reviewed it :') x