Don't Listen to Those Lies

Don't Listen to Those Lies

A Poem by haymaker14
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....

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Just because they say it,
doesn't mean it's true
If they are rude to you,
I will sing them a quite mean tune.

Princess you must pick up your head,
for your tiara is falling.
I wan't you to know,
you have a friend in you.

I will stand bye you,
through thick and thin.
Don't listen to those lies,
you may feel you are drowning in

Save yourself right now,
quit thinking about them.
Pick up your tiara,
for you rule over those peasants.

One day they will work for you,
and have nothing to say,
But until that very day,
await your custom king.

So stop harming
a beuatiful body,
for beautiful bodies
are meant to overrule 

© 2013 haymaker14


Author's Note

haymaker14
I know it doesn't rhyme that much

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"I will stand bye you,
through thick and thin.
Don't listen to those lies,
you may feel you are drowning in"

This is personally my favorite verse ^^^. The entire thing was well done though. ^_^ Good job!! :D

Posted 7 Years Ago


haymaker14

7 Years Ago

Thanks you :) I appreciate your helpful review!
Its good but could use some work buit opverall good job. keep writing

Posted 7 Years Ago


haymaker14

7 Years Ago

Thanks
No need to make rhyme to make the poem good, your work connects to the reader and that all that matters. :) i find this piece honest and captivating. just keep writing. This is a great write, I believe in this piece.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Marc Marlon Villaflor

7 Years Ago

:) just follow your heart it will do magic
haymaker14

7 Years Ago

:) Thanks for the tip
Marc Marlon Villaflor

7 Years Ago

Welcome :)
well, buddy, that's a nice one as i read, yeah, i read your author's note, there you''ve written that "it doesn't rhyme that much", well, then how much it's rhyme...lol
just kiddin' man, it's good to read..to think...to analyse, even i like such kinda an inspirational pieces' ...yeah, it's quite seemin' alike inspirational one...
well, it doesn't matter your word...you writin'...your poetry does rhyme or not, it does matter how you convert reality into your own words in an appropriate manner and i saw here depth..i felt here depth in your this writin'...it's a piece...
i'm not gonna critize you anymore, but "believe on you, if you think it's good, then all'll think ...read ...it's good...be positive man..
well, i think, it's a inspirational writin' and if i got somethin' to you to say, then i wanna say, instead of rhyme, your this writin'' has contained deepness, inspirations, analysation, thoughts, and so more...
well written, your writin' ink 's nice and words're the biggest thing that i liked here in your writin' and moreover if i got to say to you, your thoughts, your tittle, your concept, and your imagination plus thinkin' all were/are of high level...

Posted 7 Years Ago


haymaker14

7 Years Ago

Thanks you for reviewing :) Yes I tried to go in depth as much as possible
A nice meaning and concept, I like it. Noticed a mistake,
''I will stand bye you,'' Bye should be by. But that's the only one I found. Could I suggest putting in some more powerful verbs? It would help with the flow. But you have a pretty good thing going here

Posted 7 Years Ago


Very inspireing poem! the imagery is wonderful and it flows well too! mind if i read request it to some of my friends on here, might help you to collect some reveiws if you want.

Posted 7 Years Ago


chaotic katie

7 Years Ago

don't be ashamed relationships are hard to maintain and sometimes not even worth the drama and "sing.. read more
haymaker14

7 Years Ago

Yeah true. Haha yeeeep the perks of being a writer :D
chaotic katie

7 Years Ago

:)

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Added on April 7, 2013
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Tags: Beautiful, Self Harm, Stop, Rude, Bully

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