Nowhere U.S.A.

Nowhere U.S.A.

A Chapter by J. Viands

Did you find yourself?

Missing in nowhere U.S.A.?

No longer feeling safe?

Is it the price you pay,

 

Perhaps do to the games you play?

Games you play with your wealth.

Maybe you should have stayed where you stay,

Or at least kept some stealth.

 

If it’s time to take action for oneself,

I suggest you pray,

In order to keep your health.

Then again the piper must collect his pay.

 

I can’t say when you came to far this way!?

But no need to delve,

Surly you have found dismay.

We will show you some hospitality,

 

Only then may you try to leave.



© 2012 J. Viands


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This is an odd poem, isn't it? Who is the voice? Especially at the end? I keep picturing some sort of city father in a top hat. This poem reminded me of many things, that weird town in Big Fish and it also made me think of something that sounds a bit like a Dead song. I like the concept very much, my critique is that is was a little too redundant in places, think about that when you reread your poem.
also:
"Perhaps do to the games you play?" "do" should be spelled: "due".

Posted 11 Years Ago


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This is an odd poem, isn't it? Who is the voice? Especially at the end? I keep picturing some sort of city father in a top hat. This poem reminded me of many things, that weird town in Big Fish and it also made me think of something that sounds a bit like a Dead song. I like the concept very much, my critique is that is was a little too redundant in places, think about that when you reread your poem.
also:
"Perhaps do to the games you play?" "do" should be spelled: "due".

Posted 11 Years Ago



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