Falling Into You Again

You were my first love, now you are still the one...

I’ve spent half of my life
educating myself and others.
You were my first love,
but I decided to forget you
and lived normally.

I don’t know why
you are knocking at my door again.
Sometimes you are gazing at my window,
waving your hands
and calling my name.
Are you making me
fall into you again?

I can’t resist it!
I thought you were my first love -
just one of the stories in my past,
among the forgotten poems I made,
like one of the paintings exhibited
in the walls of my dark chest.
But until now I can feel it-
the love I have for you in decades
is like a seed in my heart.
Now it is growing as I feel your spirit.
I’m falling into you again.

How blissful I am
to do these things with you.
I love you so much.
You are the melody I sing,
the verse I hear from my heart,
the tale in my mind,
the beauty I coat in my canvass.
Art, I’m falling into you again…

~~¤~~

Author's Note

Reviews

[Sir Joe]

Hi, Dhaye! It's been a long time!
hehehe

Let me start by saying something about the title. I think you chose the wrong preposition or, shall I say, the less appropriate preposition. "Falling into you" is different from "falling for you". You may also say "getting into you" if "into" sounds better for you. Consider changing the lines in the poem containing the phrase "falling into you".

This poem is a free verse, right? You did not give much regard to the basic elements of poetry namely rhyme, rhythm and meter. In this poem, I see no rhyming pattern, hear less musicality and notice no particular metric scheme. Since the elements are not so present in the piece, I was expecting that you would employ some other literary devices that would have made the piece a lot more poetic. You should've used more figures of speech. It could also help if you become less literal with what you really want to say. For example, instead of saying "the water is boiling", you could actually say "the kettle whistles as it gargles water atop the dancing fire". We call it "defamiliarization". That is, saying something familiar to the readers in an unfamiliar way. I know you get it. =)

Try to look at the way you have written this piece. Look at the words that you used. Most parts are so literal. But the last part holds much weight because of the choice of words. Diction is really important in crafting poetry.

Also, try to be more of an imagist than of a narrator especially in writing short poems. You can do "telling" but I suggest you do more of "showing".

When it comes to the theme or subject of the poem, I must say that you are still stirring my mind. =) I'm torn between two interpretations. Thinking that the addressee is a person is plausible. Nevertheless, saying that you are merely talking about being into arts again is also plausible. Would you mind to enlighten my mind to shoo way this dilemma? Anyway, the latter sounds more plausible to me. =)

Dhaye, there is really much in you that just needs more stretching and squeezing. Smile! I know your next pieces will be "wow"!
=)


- joe

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Sir Joe, I will just explain my side upon writing this piece.
I just thought I have chosen the right title. Please see the title of Celine Dion's song which I embedded here. I just made it Falling into You Again because I want to emphasize it's my 2nd time to fall in love with it (I decided to forget it, but now I am hooked into it again). Does "Falling For You" perfectly shows what I mean? Then, if it does, I would use it.
I used Personification here as a literary device, since I am referring to Art (Arts) as my past love, and I am again hooked with it. I really love painting, literature (I know I'm not a professional one), and music.
I'm sorry if you've got a problem about the theme. I thought you know it's Personification. I thought you "read" the pictures also. Hehe. Smile! :)

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Hehe. :) Thank you for your precious time spent in reviewing my work. You are a good teacher, for you are teaching me to learn what literature is. But it's just that I expect that you would give me your suggested lines for those that needed to be changed (literal as you've said). Even this time only. Next time I would do it myself. I just can't squeeze my mind now...or perhaps I've reached my limitations. (: (: (:

[Sir Joe]

=)
Dhaye, thank you for your response. =) I understand your point now. This is the good thing about this website; we get to respond to other people's reviews. In interpreting this poem of yours, I used Formalism. This approach does away with the life of the author as the text assumes a life of its own. I read it without considering that the poetic persona is you yourself. Without saying your take on it, I think saying that if I say it's probably about a man or about being into arts again, neither would be wrong so long as it's supported well.
You also mentioned about personification, especially in the last part of the poem. A reader, thinking that the poem is about falling in love again with a man, could just reasonably say that the figure of speech being employed in the last part is simply metaphor.

As regards the title, I hear "falling for you" more often than "falling into you" when what is being meant is "being in love with you".

Dhaye, don't get me wrong. I don't have any problem with the theme of the poem. I'm just saying that it has a power to pluck different thoughts from the minds of the readers, like what it did to me. And it's a good thing, right? Even without you saying "hey, reader, this poem is about this or that", it's a very nice thing that the readers still make something of the poem. That means your poem provokes thoughts.

Now, since you've already revealed that it's about being into arts again, then be it. But as I've said, you've written a piece that now assumes a life of its own and that has the power to stimulate the minds of the readers.

Smile! =)


- joe

[Sir Joe]

*I think saying that it's probably about a man....

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Ah, okay. But when you hear a word or a phrase more often than the other way it can be expressed, doesn't mean it's the only right word, right?
And the use of personification, the attribution of human qualities to objects or abstract notions, is stated at the 2nd stanza, not the last one (you're right it's metaphor). But thanks, you've reminded me that I have used it here. Hehe. I did not consider it here since it is just common for me like most writers use it often. At least I have used more than one literary device here. Hehe! Thanks, Sir. See, I've learned from you :)

[Sir Joe]

My dear friend, this poem of your is good in its own, changes are not really necessary unless you feel that you can still make it better. And if you do, I can only suggest that you write some of the lines in a different light, in a more poetic and rhythmic manner since you've already got rid of the main elements of poetry. For example:
* Instead of saying
"I don’t know why
you are knocking at my door again."

You can just say
"My mindful mind minds mindfully
Why my ears hear your clear jeers
Outside and your knocks on the door
And knacks on the knob"

You don't need to adapt these lines. This is jut an example of saying things in a different light. I'm pretty sure your ideas are a lot better. You have it, Dhaye. Just let it out. =)

[Sir Joe]

alliteration and assonance

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Naisahan ba kita, Sir Joe? Hehe. Kala mo SI art, yun pala ANG art, or Ats. Yes, nalito siya. He thinks that it's probably about a man.... :) :) :)

Wala lang....I am happy I have a great conversation with my favorite writer here. That's true. You are honest in your review...and so do I. Tagal mo kasi mag-online dito. Kami-kami na lang nina Pax at Marlon ang nakakapag-usap.

[Sir Joe]

"*I think saying that it's probably about a man...."
---> correction lang to dun sa first comment q,my mali kc sa sentence. hehehe
Dba I've already told you na sa two interpretations na nasa mind q, ung latter ung mas plausible para sakin. =)

Gusto q sanang maki-interact dto lagi kaya lng laging busy sa work,,,hai grabe,,,,kaya nga if I have time, dto agad aq,,,hehehe d n nmn nga aq nkakapag-sulat eh,,,hai

Thank you for saying such words, Dhaye. I'm happy we've crossed paths. =)

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Ah, yeah...alliteration and assonance. When I use them, it would be for the whole piece, not in only one part. The truth is: I am not a fan of Simile, Metaphor, Assonance, Alliteration, or Anaphora. I prefer to use Personification and Irony, to let the things go like simple as that but not really is. That's why sometimes I am using them unintentionally.

[Sir Joe]

Ahhhh. I just hope that I was able to help even just in the littlest way. =)

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

You did when you remind me of using Metaphor in this piece. Thanks, I've learned. :)
Mahaba na ba ang conversation? Pinahaba ko talaga. Hehe. Para sulit naman na naligaw ka lang dito sa page ko. Thanks po talaga sa time. God bless!

[Sir Joe]

Hehehe pero I hope you have understood what I meant when I said that the poem assumes a life of its own. In which case, you don't control what the readers can make of the poem, it's the poem itself that does the control of the mind of the readers. In a formalist's perspective, what the writer says about his/her piece is not much of a big consideration when it comes to interpreting the work. The piece can arouse a lot of interpretations and not one of them can be considered wrong so long as they are well supported and are still conforming to the words in the literary text.

[Sir Joe]

hahaha cluttered tlga ang mind q,,,grbe,,,,parang ang gulo gulo ng mga cnsbi q hahahaha

[Blue Belle]

It's an amazing poem! :)

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Thanks. )

[Ency Bearis]

Beautifully rendered emotion to your hobby - art, or maybe that's the name of your first love - Art. Is your husband name Art ? If not, then this is a disguise ( para huwag mahalata ) I'm just joking. He,he,he. However this is really an astute write of introspection. Lovely indeed.

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Disguise?????????? Sir Ency ha? ART po yun. ARTS - music, painting, literature - things I love but I had not much time with.
Glad you like this piece. :)

[Ency Bearis]

I know it is form of arts, eh yong word mo kasi is Art, hindi mo linahat -arts - My comments ay sadyang pabiro lang. Sorry if you did not get it. I apologize or the way I did it.

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Ay, hindi naman ako pikunin. Okay lang yung joke mo, Sir Ency. No need to apologize. Natatawa lang ako, At least, most of you had the same view on this. Nalito kayo. Hehehhehehhe

[Ency Bearis]

It's okay. : )

[ms. barrie]

First off, I really enjoy this poem as it really makes one (me) feel, therefore so relateable, especially for me. This really reminds me of my ex b.f. and I's relationship. Especially the second stanza...actually made my heart ache.

Now onto the poem, I love the fluidity of this with its pleasing melodic rhyme, repetition of "falling into you again."

The imagery you convey here speaks volumes, and you portrayed it here with eloquence and poignancy.

This is a wonderful, heart-felt poem, thanks for sharing and Pen on :)

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Thanks, BarrieJoy. :)

[ms. barrie]

you're quite welcome, Dhaye or From Light to Dark, :)

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

One of my fave song of Celine :) love the poem it is honest and bitter sweet memories, I know love like first love is unforgettable even how many decades passed, this is a sweet poem always flow with raw emotions thanks for sharing my friend.

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

You did not read the last line?

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

I read it and you fall in love with him again :)

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

It's not HIM. It's IT. It's ART...ARTS...literature, painting, music, poetry... I decided to forget it during my high school days and focused in my studies. Now... I am into it again. Whew!

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

hahhaah :) really i lost, let me re-read it :)

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thought his name is art hahahaha

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

I'm I lost with the words "you" I thought you talking to a literal person. anyway it is a good poem.

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

It's Personification, a literary device...making an inanimate thing to be like a human - moving like a person. You can see it in the 2nd stanza. :)

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

:) Yes truly you are brilliant, sorry if my thought did not hit the right point hehehe I am point blank :) anyway now I know all, but it is good you have comeback to pursue this dreams.

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

...and somehow got addicted like you do. Haha. Sleeping late and waking up so early...

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

lol :) yeah

[Frieda P]

This is a supreme write...I love everything about it, the feel, the format, the music, relatable and so lovely, can't say more!

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Thanks for the visit, Ms. F. I am so honored for the word "supreme". It flatters me. :)

[Frieda P]

'Tis...this one spoke to me, and yay, I get to listen to this lovely music again too...my pleasure! :-)

[Azriel]

really great piece here, i think you captured really well the feeling of "falling into someone". great images used throughout, think the 3rd stanza is one of my favorites I've read in a long time. overall wonderful poem.

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Thank you, Azriel. I' m falling into "something". I know all of us here are really in love with Arts (music, painting, poetry). :)

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

So heartfelt, and wise... and very recognizable for me!!!

"You are the melody I sing,
the verse I hear from my heart,
the tale in my mind,
the beauty I coat in my canvass"

Are the best lines of this poem, in my opinion,
Truly artistic. Thank you so much for your
the beauty in your words, and your heart.

- Elisa

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

My dear Elisa... we are just the same. I know you are also hooked with Arts. I love writing and painting since high school but I decided to stop when I became busy in my studies. Now, I am falling into it again. :)

I'm so proud of you, and happy the time is there again for exploring arts, as you should to.. Yes, I'm pretty the same! I always carried for others, less for myself ;) but I guess it's our roots, and genes, we find that normal hehe ;) x

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Agree. :)

[Pax]

I knew the feeling very well... may our memory fades, but our hearts never forget... at first i thought this was about first love on someone... but the ending is quite clever way to expressed... the love for art never fades in our hearts... its always there... like falling in love everyday... awesome write my friend...

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Thanks for the visit. Glad you like it. :)

[Pax]

your most welcome kabayan...

[Jack...]

This was very nice and I know the feeling exactly.

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Haha...I'm in love with total ARTS... music, literature, painting.
Thanks for the review, Jack.

[Jack...]

I am with you, I write music and play various instruments, I paint and sculpt and I garden. Oh yeah, I also write.