A Ribbon for You

A Concrete Poetry

Author's Note

Reviews

[Sir Joe]

Ok, Dhaye. Let me tie that ribbon on your dress. You deserve not just a shining red ribbon but also a glittering gold crown.
Not only does your poem form a perfect image but also holds a great weight. That ribbon must be heavy! hehehe
While I was reading it, I was like chanting a wonderful song. The rhyming effected beautifully. Simple words were used but the poesy is very much on the rise. The musicality and the rhythm made it easy for me to free-flowingly read through.

Are there other colors available?
=)


- joe

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Yes, yellow. But you see, the music is about red ribbon. I don't want to embed here "Tie a Yellow Ribbon". hehehe.
Thanks for such compliment from yours. It's an honor for me. :)

[Sir Joe]

You're welcome, Dhaye. For me, this piece is flawless so I have not mentioned any objections about the piece, only praises. =)

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Yes! At last, I passed the taste of a great literati. Thanks a lot 10X. It's up to you if there's something you have to keep and not to voice it out now. Lol. :) Don't break the record, please. Hehe :)

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

How about the first one I made? It's title is Dream (A Distant Star). It does not have color but the music is perfect for the piece.

[Pink Witch]

I hope you win the contest.
The words and rhymes are so good,
with the ribbon of creativity tied over it:)

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Thanks a lot, Pink Witch. I am inspired by your compliments. :)

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

My second Concrete Poetry..an entry to a contest. :)