CHAPTER IV.  AT THE ELEVATOR

CHAPTER IV. AT THE ELEVATOR

A Chapter by Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)
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My God! He’s so handsome. And I don’t care about the 7th floor now.

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CHAPTER IV. 

                      

                    I saw it! There’s the elevator. I have to be on the 7th floor  before 8:10 am.

              “Okay, here I am 7th floor,” I whispered to myself while reaching the button to press number 7. But to my dismay, someone's hand pressed the button. I am not alone at the elevator! I felt  the increase of my wrinkles and the movement of my eyebrows. I prepared  myself for a war. Yes! I have to do this because it seems that my first ever client will be lost and the door to my career will close soon just because of this person.

                I faced at the person, attempting to speak my “How dare you” words as a start of the war. But his lips formed the sweetest smile Marian should have been taken a photo. He moved his head and by looking at the button, I understood that he means “Look!” I am surprised again. It’s number 7. He pressed number 7, and we’re going to the same floor of this building. I just smiled back at him, the sweetest smile I could ever give to a man. My God! He’s so handsome. And I don’t care about the 7th floor now.



© 2013 Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)


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Pax
awkward sentences again with awkward moments :D ~

I don't understand this somehow:
But to my dismay a big hand 'came over to pass me' and pressed the button.

Im not sure about this sentence, maybe to me but i needed to mention it ~
"I faced at the person" ~ i think it needed a rephrase ~

~ i find this awkward again~
But his lips opened and formed the sweetest smile Marian should have been taken a photo.

can i rephrase it like this(parang kasing nakanganga siya then nag smile LOL):
but his lip formed the sweetest smile i ever saw, then Marian should be here to take a photo of those precious smile.

good chapter ~ remember kabayan di ako expert sa grammar ~ you can disregard my suggestion if its not helpful...

Posted 8 Years Ago


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Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)

8 Years Ago

Di rin nga ako sure don sa big hand came over to pass me. Kasi nagmamadali siya, di niya napansin m.. read more
Pax

8 Years Ago

But to my dismay a big hand 'came over to pass me' and pressed the button
~ but to my dismay, .. read more
Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)

8 Years Ago

Hehe. Nagawan ko na ng paraan. Thanks, Pax.



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Pax
awkward sentences again with awkward moments :D ~

I don't understand this somehow:
But to my dismay a big hand 'came over to pass me' and pressed the button.

Im not sure about this sentence, maybe to me but i needed to mention it ~
"I faced at the person" ~ i think it needed a rephrase ~

~ i find this awkward again~
But his lips opened and formed the sweetest smile Marian should have been taken a photo.

can i rephrase it like this(parang kasing nakanganga siya then nag smile LOL):
but his lip formed the sweetest smile i ever saw, then Marian should be here to take a photo of those precious smile.

good chapter ~ remember kabayan di ako expert sa grammar ~ you can disregard my suggestion if its not helpful...

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)

8 Years Ago

Di rin nga ako sure don sa big hand came over to pass me. Kasi nagmamadali siya, di niya napansin m.. read more
Pax

8 Years Ago

But to my dismay a big hand 'came over to pass me' and pressed the button
~ but to my dismay, .. read more
Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)

8 Years Ago

Hehe. Nagawan ko na ng paraan. Thanks, Pax.

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Hello! I am Dhaye, a public secondary school teacher, a passionate artist "married" to her dream. I write in different perspectives. So please know NOT all my works are about me. .. more..

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