Old or Young?

Old or Young?

A Chapter by Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)
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Dodoitsu Poem in Trio

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Poem 34

When I was ten, mother asked

To cook our meal on that day.

I refused then she got mad:

“Why? You’re old enough!”

 

When I was fifteen, I heard

My mother shouting in wrath:

“Hey, what are these love letters?

These are not for young!”

 

When I was thirty, she said:

“Why don’t you have a boyfriend?”

I said to her: “Tell me first,

am I old, or young?”







© 2016 Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)


Author's Note

Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)
Inspired by Dodoitsu Poem of Sir Ency

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A fun poem to read. Funny how questions can change with age and time. Thank you Dhaye for sharing your wonderful poetry.
Coyote

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)

4 Years Ago

Thanks a lot for reading, sir.
Coyote Poetry

4 Years Ago

You are welcome dear Poet.
its works like this that stir my thoughts, we all go through this in life, you brought back memories that have left me to ponder now that I am old.lol.
Excellent write.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)

8 Years Ago

Thanks, Mauricio .:)
Clever little write. It has a bit of a mouthy bite. Enjoyable.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)

8 Years Ago

Thanks, Brianna. :)
Haha as a teen I connect even more with this. So true! Mothers can't make up their minds. I love the way you tell a story here and give a strait forward meaning to it. The bit of wit at the end is great! Amazing job!

Posted 8 Years Ago


Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)

8 Years Ago

Thanks, Imara. I'm glad you like this piece. :)
The conversation sounds...well, so familiar... and it gave me a good chuckle. i like reading short, light and fun pieces like this. great job kabayan.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)

8 Years Ago

Sonnet? That's nice. I haven't tried it yet. It's good you knew how to make that kind of poetry. Can.. read more
gabrielle

8 Years Ago

I am familiar with the sonnet's technical form. but i find it too rigid and it’s too taxing (for m.. read more
Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)

8 Years Ago

Okay, I am having now a little research. There are different examples from different "sonneteers". I.. read more
:) she ended as single till 30? lol she never got a chance. lol nice job.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)

8 Years Ago

I just made it funny, According to Sir Ency, Dodoitsu is usually comical.
Thanks for reading i.. read more
Marc Marlon Villaflor

8 Years Ago

oo tama yun even senryu ganun yata comical din
Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)

8 Years Ago

Hindi kaya. Sabi niya kanina, perfect Senryu nga daw yung "Two Days" ko. Weeeh...
loved the message. repression by parents sometimes affects their children's life in a much more adverse way that it could have otherwise.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)

8 Years Ago

Thanks for dropping by, Shivam. :)
Shivam Murari

8 Years Ago

you are welcome :)
ha, ha,ha nice one - I loved it. But you only have 6 syllables in 2nd stanza it should be seven. May I suggest to complete it - To cook our meal on that day.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)

8 Years Ago

Ay, oo nga. Iba kasi dati yang line, pangit pakinggan, binago ko...kulang pala. Hehe. Thanks po. Sab.. read more
Ency Bearis

8 Years Ago

Okay now that's perfect.
Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)

8 Years Ago

Yes! I did it. Thank you for guiding me, Sir. I've learned another kind of poem this day. :)
Sir Ency, this is my first Dodoitsu poem. Thanks to you. :)
Feedbacks are welcome. :)

Posted 8 Years Ago



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