Poem 22.   I DANCED WITH YOU

Poem 22. I DANCED WITH YOU

A Chapter by Margaux (Dhaye)


The end of waiting for the night here comes

For I now hold you again in my arms

While the mellow music of our hearts plays

In its full gracefulness, your body sways.

 

You blend with the darkness of this  very night

As we swing in the air with our minds so bright

Never ask for more than this sacred tie

And together we dance, just you and I.

 

But as the night is fading at my sight

You likely vanish leaving me with  blight

The day reveals who you are as my mate

Fathoms the truth, I danced with my silhouette.





© 2013 Margaux (Dhaye)


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Very very beautiful. The picture you have chosen is most fitting for this piece. That's the first thing I noticed. In three stanzas you've conveyed such pure emotions that it makes the heart bleed. This poem really conveys the feeling of being in love. Most of the times, we are dancing with our very own silhouette. Loved this.

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Margaux  (Dhaye)

7 Years Ago

Thanks, JulieEmile. I truly appreciate your compliments. :)



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Pax
seems like forbidden love is your theme here ~ like a short poem from you novel...
I always find forbidden love temporary, it never last if you don't do something about it ~

indulgence ~ its part of human nature that is hard to contained ~ a mistake can be repeated over and over because ika nga Masarap ang bawal eh ~ then we consume and consume until its too late to fix or undone...

but then again this is not about that ~ this talks about fantasy, about some you have a crush, fantasizing you and him dancing the love that can never be...

great piece kabayan ~
nicely done!
100

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Pax

7 Years Ago

haha ~ your only old if you think your old enough ~ your young as you feel you are ~
Margaux  (Dhaye)

7 Years Ago

I think I am old, with childish behavior sometimes. Hahaha.
Pax

7 Years Ago

its good being childish for a time ~ it makes you feel young at times :)
this is well-written piece dhaye. when i read this i think that if a person could dance alone during those lonely nights, this would speak so much of her independent nature. When i read it again several interpretations came out (1) that the voice probably is an in-love night worker (2) or the voice is into a forbidden love affair (3) or the voice is in-love with a vampire (lol). Kabayan, when i read poems i really have some of the most out of this world's interpretations. i hope you'd indulge me on this.

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Margaux  (Dhaye)

7 Years Ago

It's no.3. Lol. You made me laugh, Gab. I am in love w/ someone who bites me.
Thanks for the n.. read more
Sometimes we find it hard to determine the fine line between illusion and delusion. Human error? Or human nature? Who knows? What is clear to me is that your poem implies falsehood in the matters of heart, but is it by choice or by chance? And again, who knows?

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Margaux  (Dhaye)

7 Years Ago

Thanks, Maryanne. Life is what we make it. We make our own choices. But often our minds are being co.. read more
Nice one, like a Cinderella story, but it's just an illusion dancing with your shadow. Great use of rhyme scheme.

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Margaux  (Dhaye)

7 Years Ago

Thanks, Sir Ency. :)
Ency Bearis

7 Years Ago

you're welcome
Very very beautiful. The picture you have chosen is most fitting for this piece. That's the first thing I noticed. In three stanzas you've conveyed such pure emotions that it makes the heart bleed. This poem really conveys the feeling of being in love. Most of the times, we are dancing with our very own silhouette. Loved this.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Margaux  (Dhaye)

7 Years Ago

Thanks, JulieEmile. I truly appreciate your compliments. :)
"And together we dance, just you and I.



But as the night is fading at my sight

You likely vanish leaving me with blight

The day reveals who you are as my mate"
The rhythm of love is set to the tunes of the heart...A well penned piece...:)

Posted 7 Years Ago


Margaux  (Dhaye)

7 Years Ago

Rhythm of an illusion, Sami.

"The day reveals who you are as my mate
Fathoms the.. read more
Sami Khalil

7 Years Ago

Good one...I love it...:)
Very good .. lovely concept and ending .


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Margaux  (Dhaye)

7 Years Ago

Thnaks, Sir Abhijit. Glad you dropped by. :)
Margaux  (Dhaye)

7 Years Ago

*Thanks. Sorry...typo :)
I was caught by the ending.
It happened most of the time, we make believe and dance with the rhythm of our mate only to find ourselves in the end being left.

I enjoyed the poem, Dhaye.

Posted 7 Years Ago


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Margaux  (Dhaye)

7 Years Ago

Thanks, blackjaye. Glad you dropped by. :)

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