Poem 30. LET ME

Just another fictional version. Another attempt...

Let us fall upon each others' neck.

Let me bury the hatchet

Which one’s you purported.

 

Let me kiss and make up

And should you not repudiate

That you, too

Have to redress the balance

That once we relished.

 

I throw the bread

You caught it,

But can you see my thirst?

Let me drink the sweetest wine

Overflowing from that goblet

You are gripping.

 

I give, you take.

Why not reciprocate?

As this life is a mirror-

You can see who stands in front of it.

 

Let me just unveil this face

So that I could see each break of day

Like the past mornings

As those great paintings

Etched on the walls of my heart

 

If you would only let me know

How could I run away

From  your apathy.

Author's Note

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

"Have to redress the balance
That once we relished."
Amazing use of words above. I like the use of language in the poem. Made me desire to read more of your word. Last lines stood out and made the poem complete. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Amazing words from you also, CP. I also like this piece inspired by a co-writer's work here using idioms. Thanks again. :)

[SquinklaPsyOps]

Great work, from the following lines "Let us fall upon each other’s neck." "Let me kiss and make up" "I throw the bread" "I give, you take." "Let me just unveil this face" "How could I run away" sounds like hickeys are difficult to hide and show the color of passion, something like that?

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Thanks, SquinklaPsyOps.

In any relationship- friendship, marriage, family relationship- there must be balance....that "give-and-take" relationship. Otherwise, if one feels that he/she is receiving unjust treatment, the tendency is to escape from the shadow of the other.

[SquinklaPsyOps]

Sold, I'm definitely acquiring your three books.

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Wow! You saw it from my profile page? Thanks a lot!

[SquinklaPsyOps]

Yes, everybody in the network thinks you're awesome, and so do I.

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Oh, I'm flattered. That's so inspiring. Thanks again.

[*Clare*]

Brilliantly written.
"I give, you take.

Why not reciprocate?" I like that!

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Thanks, Clare.

[Talal Hussain]

What a wonderful compositon,loved it :-)

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Thanks, Talal.

[Sami Khalil]

"life is a mirror-

You can see who stands in front of it.




Let me just unveil this face

So that I could see the break of day

Painted in my eyes"
An excellent write and the ending was marvelous...Thank you for sharing ...:)

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Thanks, Sami.

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)