UNTIL THE SUNSET

You came
Like the wind that gently embraced me
And made me sway and dance for a moment
Then suddenly frittered me away
And left me alone with a graze.

You were the wind
When once I dreamed of love
To be forever
But showed yourself as a gale
Which toughly brushed my skin
And left me with a sore.



And I...

I am still the fragile flower in the field
Waiting for the gale to roll in
Like before
Even for a moment
To brush my skin
And leave me even deeper wounds.

I don't care.

I don't care how many wounds
And how many scars will be left on me.
Just come again.
Embrace me.
Feel me.
Sway with me
Until my weakness  entrench my roots
And make me bite the dust.



I will wait...
For the wind
That once my coarse blanket.

I will wait...
From the first light


Until the sunset.

Author's Note

Reviews

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Amazing, Dhaye! You started with a smooth flow of thought and rhythm and this stanza

"I don't care.
Just come again.
Embrace me.
Feel me.
Sway with me
Until my weakness entrench my roots
And make me bite the dust."

speaks or urgency and desperation. Then you dramatically shifted to enthralling smooth lines and you ended the poem exceptionally. I'm proud of you, my fellow Filipino. ;) Keep up the good work. :x

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Thank you so much, Blue. Actually this is one of my fave free verse poems...and it is very memorable to me. Glad you like this.

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

I assume you poured out your soul into this one. :) Great music, too. :x

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Actually, my soul's in this book. Almost all of my works here tells the same story once upon a time. And the the music was painstakingly chosen for the content.
Thank you again.

[ms. barrie]

This is...breathtaking, Dhaye, simply, utterly so breathtaking that i am (as of now) at a loss for words...i will try to rectify that at a later time but i'm too stunned to think to say anything more now . wow! such in depth beauty in your words. Thanks for sharing! :)

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

In depth beauty in words...Wow! You flatter me, BJ. Thank you so much for the compliment.

[MOON]

Poignant lovely imagery. Longing for lost love.

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Thanks, Moon.

[Sami Khalil]

Wow. I think this is one of your best. A very nice poem along with the imagery and feelings...Well done as always ...:)

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Thanks, Sami. :)

[Sami Khalil]

My pleasure...:)

[papermush08]

such longing of love!
A brave speech of emotion. :)

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Thanks, PaperMush.

[Rita L. Sev]

A beautiful poem full of longing. Gentle wording, great metaphor - lovely write, Dhaye!

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Thaks, Rita.

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

*Thanks, Rita.

[Coyote Poetry]

A very sad and beautiful poem. I could feel the longing for something missed. I like the use of nature. We can fall into nature and know some sort of peace. Thank you for the amazing artwork and poetry.
Coyote

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Thanks, CP.

[EileenMarie]

I think you penned what a lot of people do when they think they have found what they were looking for in love. Sometimes we don't always do what is best but it is a lesson we learn!! Great write :)

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Thanks, Eileen.

[gabrielle]

Now, you are sounding like a martyr =). being a martyr is quite romantic in pen but in real life it could be a purgatory. lol. nice concept dhaye!

P.s. I am loving your photo choices. Sunflowers.

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Hehe. Take note of my description above. This is my third attempt...to fiction-writing. I like to discover on how can I write something not involving emotions. Lately, I am really challenged to make poems using idioms, simile and metaphor which I am not use to.

Glad you like the concept and the photos. I like this poem, too...like my other 2 latest pieces.
Thanks a lot and congrats...my first reviewer. Hehe.