Poem 22. PARALLEL

Not my own story. I just came up with something like this.

 

 

“I’m sorry”, he said

But she chose to pretend

That she never heard.

 

“Can I go back?”, he asked

But she chose not to react

She just stared and stopped.

 

 “Alright, I understand”, he exclaimed

And with misty eyes, he left

While those tears rolled down on her face…

Author's Note

Reviews

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

I'm curious, Ate. Why did you entitle your poem "Parallel"?

Anyway, I love how you let the readers "feel" the poem instead of doing all the explaining. I am a fan of prose poetry. I just think narrative rocks. I like this, Ate. :)

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

The equivalent emotion of one party to the other presented at the last verse....

Thanks for the read and review, sis.

[Will Neill]

Dhaye, A short poem packed with so emotion. Nice work, I look forward to reading more of your work.
Will

[wordwarrior]

Lovely writing with intense emotion. Such a sad tale but not unlike many of life's challenges. SWell penned.
Write on!

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Thanks a lot, ww. I appreciate the kind words...

[SquinklaPsyOps]

Beautifully composed and rendered with delicate descriptions as sharp as the brush tip of a watercolourist.

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Thanks, Anika.

[Belle]

Damage has been done, sorry is not enough. One can forgive, but hard to forget the feelings created by the act done so I think that is the reason why we cannot just take someone back even if he is deeply sincere with his sorry.

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Welcome back, Ms. Belle. And thanks for this surprised visit. It's true. I can see that in many cases. The quote "forgive and forget" is really difficult to follow.

BTW, glad to see your "face" again. :)

[Belle]

Thank you, Dhaye. I feel the same, glad to have you found my " face" glad to see. Ha .ha. Talagang naka- quote unquote pa.

[gabrielle]

someone has to eat a humble pie but the same would be useless if the other prefers "pride chicken" =). short yet packed with heavy emotions.

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

LOL. Nagutom ako bigla sa pie at chicken.

Yes, if someone has to be humble but the other party still stands on his pride, nothing will happen but the scene presented.

Thanks, Gab.

[gabrielle]

welcome dhaye

[Mark Heathcote]

Intense emotions well expressed, nicely done.

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Thanks, Mark. :)

[Antoñyo]

This pic inspired you?
A nice brief but powerful scene with the photo to match....let's the mind race a bit.

Thanks for the share!

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Thanks for the read and review. And yes, the pic inspired me. :)

[Sami Khalil]

Well , I see a parallel between the tears and heartbreaks...Splendidly sad...:)

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Who doesn't want a happy ending anyway? But sometimes it has to be like this.


Thank you once again, Sami. :)

[Sami Khalil]

You are right...You are welcome...:)