Poem 22.  PARALLEL

Poem 22. PARALLEL

A Chapter by Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)
"

Not my own story. I just came up with something like this.

"


 

 

“I’m sorry”, he said

But she chose to pretend

That she never heard.

 

“Can I go back?”, he asked

But she chose not to react

She just stared and stopped.

 

 “Alright, I understand”, he exclaimed

And with misty eyes, he left

While those tears rolled down on her face…




© 2013 Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)


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I'm curious, Ate. Why did you entitle your poem "Parallel"?

Anyway, I love how you let the readers "feel" the poem instead of doing all the explaining. I am a fan of prose poetry. I just think narrative rocks. I like this, Ate. :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)

7 Years Ago

The equivalent emotion of one party to the other presented at the last verse....

Thanks.. read more
Dhaye, A short poem packed with so emotion. Nice work, I look forward to reading more of your work.
Will

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lovely writing with intense emotion. Such a sad tale but not unlike many of life's challenges. SWell penned.
Write on!

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)

7 Years Ago

Thanks a lot, ww. I appreciate the kind words...
Beautifully composed and rendered with delicate descriptions as sharp as the brush tip of a watercolourist.

Posted 7 Years Ago


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Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)

7 Years Ago

Thanks, Anika.
Damage has been done, sorry is not enough. One can forgive, but hard to forget the feelings created by the act done so I think that is the reason why we cannot just take someone back even if he is deeply sincere with his sorry.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)

7 Years Ago

Welcome back, Ms. Belle. And thanks for this surprised visit. It's true. I can see that in many case.. read more
Belle

7 Years Ago

Thank you, Dhaye. I feel the same, glad to have you found my " face" glad to see. Ha .ha. Talagang.. read more
someone has to eat a humble pie but the same would be useless if the other prefers "pride chicken" =). short yet packed with heavy emotions.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)

7 Years Ago

LOL. Nagutom ako bigla sa pie at chicken.

Yes, if someone has to be humble but the othe.. read more
gabrielle

7 Years Ago

welcome dhaye
Intense emotions well expressed, nicely done.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)

7 Years Ago

Thanks, Mark. :)
This pic inspired you?
A nice brief but powerful scene with the photo to match....let's the mind race a bit.

Thanks for the share!

Posted 7 Years Ago


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Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)

7 Years Ago

Thanks for the read and review. And yes, the pic inspired me. :)
Well , I see a parallel between the tears and heartbreaks...Splendidly sad...:)

Posted 7 Years Ago


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Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)

7 Years Ago

Who doesn't want a happy ending anyway? But sometimes it has to be like this.


Th.. read more
Sami Khalil

7 Years Ago

You are right...You are welcome...:)

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Hello! I am Dhaye, a public secondary school teacher, a passionate artist "married" to her dream. I write in different perspectives. So please know NOT all my works are about me. .. more..

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